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Hi, my name is Karen Li. I am an admissions officer of East Harlem University college. There are four people that is applying to my college. I will have to use the TEARS strategy to guide me pick one of the candidates. Candidates are hard to pick because they all have different strengths in different categories. For example William Santos has a better SAT score than Jasmine Duke but Jasmine duke has a better transcript than William Santos. The most important category for me is the transcript because the grades you get from the teachers are the grades they give you and how you do in class. Also the attendance is most important because if you don't come to class and participate in class activities how would you know what's going on in class. The second most important thing i check in the TEARS is the recommendations because the teachers tells me how the student behaves in class and how she or he strengths and weakness. Also it may tell us something we don't know about the components. The third most important is the Essay because it tells us about how he or she has changed and has an epiphany and how it changed his or her grades. The fourth most important is the activities because i don't really care about the SAT's it is biased. The activities also tells us how he or she takes his/her responsibility seriously.

The first candidate is Roman Polanco. Looking at Roman Polanco's application, he started off from the 60's and 70's but then there was an upward trend to the 80's and 90's by 12th grade. His greatest strength is Spanish and one of his biggest weakness is math and science. In his freshman year he had lots of lateness and absence but then as he reached to 12th grade he has decreased his absences and lateness. His regents scores are in the 80's. Roman's recommendation's tells me that he's a late bloomer, trustworthy, and is a leader. He is one of the most reliable students at the school and model for students. You can also tell that he's a leader from his activities. He has been a student ambassadors for 4 years, that's a good thing because he can stay in that activity more than one year and stick to it. Roman's essay tells us about his epiphany about how he didn't quit promoting the breast cancer awareness walk. He thought nobody would come but 50 people had came. It tells him that he should not quit and be a leader. He has a low SAT score but it's okay because i don't think SAT's are the most important thing in the TEARS category.

The second candidate is William Santos. Looking at William Santos's application, his grades were almost like Roman's but had lots of absences and lateness especially in the 12th grade. His greatest weakness is science and global. He has a lot of 65's in his transcript. William Santos's essay has no epiphany and only about one paragraph long. He did not put any effort into his essay. His essay doesn't have a hook. On a scale of 1-10 i would rate his essay a big fat zero. William Santos did his home activities for four years that shows he has a little bit of responsibility taking care of family dog. William's recommendation tells us that he is destined for success at a college level and has excellent SAT scores. I don't think i will accept William Santos to my school because the SAT are not as important than transcripts to me.

The next candidate is Jasmine Duke. Looking at Jasmine Duke's application, her grades