Nathifa+Spencer+Admission+Essay

Nathifa Spencer/903

As an admission officer I ranked the TEARS as Transcript, Recommendation, Activities, Essay, and S.A.T.s. I ranked transcript first because I care about grades and attendance/lateness. I ranked recommendations as second because I care about what teachers thought about the students. I ranked activities as third because I kind of care about the activities that the students did or does. I ranked essay as fourth because I don't really care about the student personal life. I ranked S.A.T.s as fifth because I don't care about the S.A.T.s because I personally think there biased.

In reviewing Kaylah Serrano application, I saw that her grades where very average. One thing that stuck out to me is her attendance and lateness she has no lateness in ninth, tenth, eleventh, and twelfth grade but one absence in the tenth grade. When Kaylah Serrano took the standardized test she had got the grades of 67% in Living Environment, 70% in Global Studies, 99% in Integrated Algebra, 71% in U.S History, 65% in English, 89% in Geometry, 98% in Spanish, and 81%in Algebra II/Trig, but below average in the S.A.T.s. When reading her essay I realize that she was from Nicaragua and that English was not her first language, that explain why her S.A.T.s scores where below average and why she barely pass the standardized English test, also I disliked how Kaylah only had little amount of activities she had done. When reading Kaylah's recommendation letter I did feel that she would be an excellent college student.

In reviewing William Santos application, I saw that his grades where horrible. One thing that stuck out to me was his upward trend that occurs in the twelfth grade. Another thing that stuck out to me was how bad his attendance and lateness was. When William Santos took the standardized test he got the grades of 87% in Living Environment, 90% in Global Studies, 89% in Integrated Algebra, 91% in U.S History, 88% in English and above average in the S.A.T.s. When reading William's essay I was disappointed it was very short I did not learn nothing about the student but that he thinks high school is boring and he feels he already knows the work and his not being challenged. One thing that I did like is the amount activities that he had completed. When reading William's recommendation letter I feel that it was faint praise and that he would make an okay college student.

In reviewing Jasmine Duke application, I saw that her grades were excellent. One thing that stuck out to me was how she kept her grades in 80's or 90's. When Jasmine Duke took the standardized test she got the grades of 85% in Living Environment, 75% in Global Studies, 81% in Integrated Algebra, 81% in U.S History, 73% in English, but below average in the S.A.T.s. When reading Jasmine's essay I learned that her mother is her inspiration and she goes to school and work hard to make her mother happy. One thing that I like is the amount of activities that Jasmine completed. When reading Jasmine's recommendation letter I feel like she would also be an excellent college student.

In reviewing Roman Polanco application, I saw that his grades were average. One thing that stuck out to me was his upward trend that occurs in the twelfth. When Roman Polanco took the standardized test he got the grades of 83% in Living Environment, 79% in Global Studies, 88% in Integrated Algebra, 84% in U.S History, 80% in English, but got below average in the S.A.T.s. When reading Roman's essay I learned that he was student ambassadors of his high school. One thing that I like is the amount of activities he has done. When reading Roman's recommendation letter I feel that they would be a great college student.

All told Kaylah is the strongest candidate for me and is my choice. She is my choice because her grades good. I also like her strong essay, and her great recommendation letter. Also her pasting the standardized English test as being a student that was not born in this country and English not being her first language