Nicholas+kassim+admissions+essay

As a new college admissions officer i honestly don't even care if any of these kids get into college. to me the T.E.A.R.S are stupid but the way the rank in importance to me is S.A.T's first then essay then transcript then activities and lastly recommendations.roman polonco is a fine student when it comes to all the T.E.A.R.S as do jasmine duke William Santos and Kaylah Serrano. there all great students but if i had to pick one to be accepted to your college it would be jasmine duke she is a fabulous student and has a very bright future ahead of her.

the first applicant i'm reviewing is roman polonco. His transcript isnt the best but its something to look at it's the upward trend i am impressed in but he didnt go up by much he was always a good student. his S.A.T.'s where alittle below average but i would tell from his transcript that he is a hard worker and a good student.he had good activities. he even became a leader which shows tremendous responsibility. his essay really spoke to me it said "i had little to no faith in my self but then i realized that if others believe in me i should believe in me as well". but alittle wordy.his recommendation seemed real enough that i would consider him for admission.

The next person i would like to review is William Santos. he.. isn't as weak a student as he seems from his transcript that much is certain if not for his S.A.T score his application would go straight to the garbage. his grades picked up in his last years which show alittle more maturity. his attendance is also a large issue. His S.A.T scores where far above average which is fantastic he is what i would call a "diamond in the rough". his school activities where unsatisfactory. But at Home he showed responsibility by babysitting his younger siblings. his personal statement although true is disgusting. His guidance counselor showed all "faint praise."

Next i would like to review Jasmine Duke. her grades and attendance are both fantastic ans she maintained an average above 80 throughout her four years of high school. her S.A.T scores where alittle below average but that isnt a prime factor to me. She maintained well activities both home and in school throughout her High school years. her personal statement is worthless it talks about her mother but her mother isnt the one applying to college now is she. the counselors recommendation made up for it though.

Last but not least is kaylah serrano. she is a unique case from what i understand. her grades are good for someone who barely spoke a lick of English. her S.A.T's where alittle below average but that's because the S.A.T's are culturally biased. she didn't work much until her junior year. her essay gives me a mental image of her life before she began high school in america. i understand her troubles as someone with Spanish decent. And to top it all off her counselor recommendation is something to be impressed by she would be very well accepted into this college.

I see four bright young students with a long and successful futures ahead of them. but sadly only one of them can build there future here. i have to take Kaylah Serrano. because she is a hard worker and has shown it time and time again academically i will not hold her S.A.T's against her.