Emani+England+College+Essay

====As an admissions officer i ranked the TEARS first SAT'S.I think sat's are important because they show your grade.They show where you are academically.They also show you what you can and can't do.Second would be essay's.I choose essay's as second because it's not as important as SAT'S.However it tell me a little bit about the student before i actually get a chance to meet them.third would be recommendations.I choose recommendations as third because I don't think student shouldn't have a recommendation to get into a school that they really want to get into. lastly activities.To me activities are not important why do me and other admissions officers should see what you did in the summer.====

====In reviewing kaylah serranto application,I saw that in the transcript that she had in upward trend however her regents scores could have been better but yeah other than that her transcripts was OK not good but OK. Kaylah essay was excellent it was persise,it had a hook,it had an epiphany, it told us specific examples but most importantly it was not a spaghetti sauce essay.Kaylah's activities were i would say average. she wasn't a leader and she had something i call breadth over depth (which means that she didn't stay in one spot she was doing one to many things).Kaylah's recommendation was really good. It told us how she was academically and how she is in her classroom. It told us what we needed to know. last but not least Kaylah's S.A.T'S.In viewing Kaylah's S.A.T'S I noticed that she did lower than i expected. I thought that she was going to get a least a 560 but I guess I was wrong.====

====In reviewing William Santos application,I saw that in the transcript that he barley passed all his classes,and attendance and lateness are a problem for this student.Also in reviewing his regents score i notice that he did excellent but how does a student with barley passing grades get excellent regent scores hmm. Williams essay was unacceptable It was short it didn't have a hook or an, epiphany. To me it look like he rushed through it. this essay is a spaghetti sauce essay. Williams activities were good, however he did have breadth over depth and wasn't a leader (colleges love leaders). he worked two jobs at fanta's hardware,and at amc movie theater. Williams recommadation was not that great.The teacher gave faint pratise(which means he didn't mean it). lastly Williams S.A.T's. His S.A.T'S were excellent really great job especially in social studies he got a 90!!!!!!.====

====In reviewing jasmine dukes application, i saw that in the transcript that she had an upward trend 9th and 10th grade. attendance/lateness are not a problem for this student.I also noticed she did not take any challenging classes hmm. Her regents scores are pretty high.She also did inquiry skills in 10th grade.Next is jasmine's essay.Her essay wasn't that good,It did not answer the real question, it does not have a hook,,it has no specific examples, although she had perfect grammar and spelling it's still a spaghetti sauce essay.following that is jasmine's activities.jasmine shows depth over breadth,however she wasn't a leader.After that is jasmine's recommendation. Her recommendation was very good it told me about how she is in the classroom,and her relationship with the teachers.lastly jasmines S.A.T's. I disliked how she did below average in everything.====

====In reviewing roman polanco application,I saw that in his transcript his grades are:60,70,80,90.His attendance/lateness are a big problem for this student.He had an upward trend(60's and70's in 9th grade to 80's and 90's in 12 grade).Math9 is a weakness. next up is his essay.His essay was really good.He told us about his self, it had a hook in the 1st sentence,Also he realizes he should have been doing this all along, Inspiring friends and raising awareness====