James+Reyes+comparative+essay

James Reyes 901 2-7-12

As an admission officer i have to rank the TEARS. I ranked the TEARS, Recommendations, Essay, Transcript , Activities , and lastly the S.A.T.'s. I ranked the recommendations first because the recommendations can explain things in the transcript and it can also tell what type of person the candidate is. I ranked Essay second because the Essay is a good way to get to know the candidate. The transcript is third because they tell a students grade and if they had an upward trend, Activities are next because they show what the candidate likes to do or if they are responsible and committed. Lastly the SAT's I think the SAT's do not tell a lot about a student than four years of school.

While reviewing Roman Polanco's application i noticed that he had an upward trend in his transcript. I also noticed that as he became older he was more responsible and started to get less lateness and absences. Roman's essay was great it had an amazing hook and it got me interested. His essay had great spelling and grammar. Also his recommendations where genuine praise and it showed that he was a leader and trustworthy. Roman's SAT's where slightly below average in critical reading and writing and slightly above in math.

Jasmine Duke had impressing grades all four years and I was surprised that she didn't have much honors classes. Jasmines essay was quite disappointing, it never answered the "real question". Jasmine talked all about her mom and not about herself. It seemed like a spaghetti sauce essay. Jasmine was committed to her STEP Program and Drama club all four years. Also, she was in her church choir and held her job babysitting. while I don't put much emphasis on the SAT's she had very low grades considering her grades in her classes.

Kaylah had average grades, but I did notice she was strong in math and spanish. Kaylah even took challenging classes for those subjects. Her essay was very good. It told about challenges about coming from a different country and how she helped her family financially. The recommendation was genuine praise and it explained why she struggled in certain subjects. Kaylah's activities were not what I expected she started working in her senior year. Lastly, her SAT scores were what I expected given her grades and from what I learned from her Recommendation.

William Santos had a bad transcript he had very bad grades and was late and absent many times over his four years of high school. His Essay was very short and didn't say anything about himself. It was a spaghetti sauce essay with not much effort. William had some activities but he had breadth not depth. William's Recommendation was faint praise it tried to sound nice but it was fake. His SAT scores were all ranging in the 600's.

In the end the candidate I choose is Roman Polanco. The Transcript's upward trend shows he has matured over time and will be ready for college. His Essay and Recommendation were both excellent and showed leadership and commitment to his activities that he participated in. This makes Roman an excellent student and i would welcome him into my college.