Kaylah+Betancourt+Comparative+Essay

As a admissions officer at W.A.V.Y U. I Believe that the transcript is most important. This is most important because it tells us about students sense of knowledge and how are there grades from 9th-12th grade. I think the essay is the next most important thing to get into this college because it tells us about who the student is outside the class room, and it tells us things we wouldn't know from the transcript. I also believe that recommendations are next important because it tells us about the students character and citizenship. Than I think activities are next because its not really important, its good to know what activities the student participated in. And did the student choose "Depth over breath". Than I will say the SAT's will be last. I think they are not that important because some people think they are bias, and any student can fail the SAT's but their grades for all four years are outstanding.

When reviewing Roman Polanco's application the first thing that grabbed my attention was his essay. His essay had a good hook, and it also answered the real question. His essay also had a good before and after, his before was he didn't really feel like he could make a change in the community, than he realized he did make a change. Than his transcript also grabbed my attention, his transcript grabbed my attention because at first he started with mostly 60's and 70's, than in 11th grade he had an upward trend and had mostly 80's and 90's. One thing I was disappointed in while viewing his transcript was his lateness and absences. His SAT's were slightly below average, but the second time he took them he did good.

His activities were outstanding! He was Student Ambassador for all 4 years, and when he got to 12th grade he became the leader. He was also a member of the debate club for 2 years. He has done some community service, he was a Soup kitchen volunteer and he participated in the Central park clean up. This shows me that he is a good leader, and he really cares about his community. He was also a has a job in Julio Franco's El Ricon Restaurant and Taco Shop, from 10th grade to present. This shows that he can keep one job and he knows what he wants and he has his mind set on one thing. While reading his recommendation his college counselor stated that he is a late bloomer. It also stated he is a strong leader and valued member of the innovation community and to me this is good because he will be a positive influence in my college.

As for William Santos he has a upward trend in his transcript. But he had a high number of absences and lateness, He was absent almost 100 times and late almost 193 times. But we never know why he was absent.Willliam's SAT's scores were above average. He was the founder of Inno-Zine (Comic Maganize about a Super Innovator). William also had to take care of his dog and he did that for all four years. He also was a employer at AMC Movie Theater at Union Square since 12th Grade, June - Present.

On the other hand, William's essay was horrible. It didn't answer the real question. His essay did not have a good hook, or an epiphany. It was not a spaghetti sauce essay but it was not a good essay. William's recommendation doesn't really tell us about him and how he is in and outside of the classroom. The only thing that his recommendation pointed out was that he has very high SAT's scores.

While looking at Jasmine Duke transcript, her grades really caught my eye. In 9th grade she really had good grades mid 80's- Mid 90's. Than over the years her grades became to get stronger and this shows me that she is a strong student and does her best. But I can tell that her weakness was English and her strength was in Science. Her essay was really disappointing, it did not answer the real question, it was about her mother and her hard work. One thing that I learned by reading her essay that I didn't know from her transcript was that her mother is her inspiration. Jasmine participated in the STEP Program at Cuny for all 4 years in High School. She was also in a Church Choir from 9th-11th grade.

Jasmines recommendation tells me that she is a incredible young lady and when she grows up she wants to be a doctor. Her transcript also tells us she came from a immigrant family who came to this country for the search of a better life. Jasmine SAT's were slightly below average, but when she took them again she had an upward trend.

While looking over Kaylah Serrano's transcript I was very impressed. Her grades were not that bad but she has an upward trend. Kaylah even challenged her self and she took challenging classes in Hunter College. This shows me that Kaylah pushes her self to do her best. Kaylah's essay has a good hook and it really made me want to read more. But her essay was a little over 500 hundred words. It told us about the struggles she had to face during High School and how she over came them. She also had good spelling an grammar.

I was disappointed with the amount of activities Kaylah had participated in. I think she could of pushed her self to do more activities. Kaylah had to walk her younger brother to school every morning and she did this for 9th and 10th grade. She was also a employer in Dunkin' Donuts from 12th grade January - present. She worked for 20 hours a week and this is a huge responsibility. Kaylah's recommendation was good. It let us know that she likes to challenge her self to take college level classes. It let us know she is a very hard worker and she loves Math and English. While looking at her SAT scores I noticed her scores were slightly below average. But the second time she took it she had an upward trend in math.

After looking over and comparing all the candidates I believe that Jasmine Duke is the strongest candidate for my college. She got high 80's-90's in all four years. Her regents scores were good, she participated in a good amount of activities. She had a good recommendation letter, and it made up for her essay that wasn't really about her. She shows me that she really wants to achieve her goals in life, and she doesn't let anything get in her way. Also she only was late and absent a couple of times. I am very proud to say that Jasmine Duke is a student I will like to attend my college.