Dan-nesha+Johnson+Admission+Essay

====When reviewing Roman Polonco's essay the first thing that stood out was his upward trend on his transcript. In freshmen year he has a big problem with lateness and attendance also he was not doing that well in his classes. His regents scores were honorable they were in the high 80's.This shows how he has grown and matured. Another thing that stood out to me was his essay. Roman answered the real question and told me about himself. His essay has an epiphany when he realized that he was doing something good all along and to keep doing the right thing. Additionally this essay has a hook because it made me keep reading! This was definitively not a spaghetti sauce essay. ====

====The next thing I look for is a good recommendation. Roman’s recommendation is not faint praise, his counselor told us what type of person roman was in the class room also Roman has a strong presence in the class room and by senior year he realized the importance of college and worked harder. Another thing I look for is activities. Roman was a student ambassador for all 4 years. This shows depth in his student ambassador. Lastly I look at the SAT's scores which I don't think that's important. His SAT scores are a little below average. I believe the SAT's are biased. My college is SAT Optional. ====

====In looking in Jasmine Dukes transcript, her grades where good and it makes sense. Her regent’s scores are high. Her weakness was global and her strength was college bound. Her essay was not impressing it never answered the real question. There was no hook or an epiphany. The essay was all about her mom. Her recommendation was not faint praise. She was extremely hard working and very respectful. ====

====Another thing i realized is that Jasmine was in a step program for four years but never was a leader. This shows depth in her activities. Lastly her SAT scores where below average. Her scores in critical reading were 430 and in math was 450 and writing where 440. ====

====In looking at Kaylah's transcript he grades where in high 80's and 90's. She was incredible absent and lateness, she always came to school. Kaylah took challenges classes at Hunter College. Her essay was very positive. I enjoyed her essay as if she was right here talking to me. It answered the real question and it has a good hook and an epiphany. This is not a spaghetti sauce essay. Additionally she had prefect spelling and grammar. ====

====Kaylah's recommendation told us that she was a very smart and she challenges herself. Also her recommendation is not faint praise. Her strength was math. Even though she came to New York in 2005 from Nicaragua she was very responsible. Kaylah was not into a lot of activities. She took her little brother to school for her freshman year and sophomore year. Kaylah's SAT scores where a little above average. Her writing was a little below average. She got a 450 in writing. It makes sense because she had trouble learning English when she came so that’s why I think the SAT is biased, so my college is SAT Optional. ====

===In looking in William Santos transcript he is a very late and lazy person. There was no upward trend and he was mostly in the 60’s. His transcript did not make sense because he was a wonderful test taker. His regents scores where in high 80's and 90s. Williams essay was a spaghetti sauce essay. There was no hook, no epiphany and no before and after. His essay was not impressing. His essay was at least 100 words. ===

====Williams recommendation was totally faint praise. All his counselor stated was the obvious that he was a late bloomer and he did start passing his classes in senior year. He was a founder of Inno-Zine. He also had the responsibly to take care of the family dog.Also he ==== ====started working in 11 grade.His SAT scores were outstanding he was above average. All of his scores were 600 or above. My school is still SAT optional. ====

====All told Kaylah is my strongest candidate for me and is my final choice. She is very bright and her grades are excellent .Her essay was outstanding and she spoke to and now i understand where her grades where like that her freshman year.Her recommendation was honest praise and even though she wasn't in a lot of activities That really didn't really matter to me because activities are not that important to me. Her SAT scores where below average but that does not matter to me because my college is SAT optional. ====