Sean+Martin+Admissions+Essay

Sean Martin __**Admissions Essay**__
Transcript, essay, activities, recommendations, SAT's, those are the five tears of joy. As an admissions officer transcripts are my number one rank as most important. Grades count the most, Im looking for students who have acquired an upward trend in their high school years. I also like if they aren't late or absent. If they have good strengths and little weaknesses. If the student has high regents scores and if their grades makes sense. Next in my rank would be the essay because I want to see if it answers the real question, " Is it about you?" The essay must have atleast five hundred words and perfect spelling and grammar. It also needs an epiphany, a point where they realized something and a good "hook". Activities comes third in my ranking. I look for leadership in the activities they've done over the years. Also when they have got a part time job its shows that they are ready to grow up and move on their own. After I put SAT's next because I like good test takers. I like students who know how to maintain composure and stay calm while taking an important test. Im looking for a 600 or higher because this is a challenging school and we are giving challenging work. Lastly I put recommendations last on my rank. This is because the student can have a bad teacher right it for them and the teacher will probably write some thing bad.

Roman Polanco is a great candidate. He hits good on all points. He shows an upward trend in his transcript not only that but he has decent grades and is a good test taker. His attendance/lateness is awful but the rest of his transcript shows he might be ready for college. His essay answers the real question and has all the requirements and has a good epiphany, it is not a spaghetti sauce essay. The activities he has done shows that he is a leader and that's outstanding. He was the student ambassador leader for 4 years, that is "Depth" which is good. On the recommendation it states that he is eager to take future steps. Although he is a late bloomer, he has taken full advantage of all his oppritunities. Roman is a good test taker and scored slightly above average, it is acceptable because of the other things that were good.

On the other hand William Santos is an okey candidate. His transcript is full of mostly 60's and 70's, but he does have an upward trend during his 11 and 12 grade years. A good thing is that he took advanced math in 11 grade His essay wasnt that bright because it doesnt answer the "real question" and it doesnt have an epiphany its also a spaghetti sauce essay, it just has good spelling/ grammar. WIlliam was a part of 4 clubs, he took care of his dog very well. As a leader he was a founder of one of his clubs and was an employer at Dunkin Donuts. His recommendation doesnt have much to say about him because he didnt do much. It only reminds me of his test scores. His SAT scores were above average, they are good enough to get in our college. He was also absent and late throughout all four of his high school years.

Jasmine Duke has a decent transcript, its not half bad. It shows me a small upward trend through her 11 and 12 grade years. Her test scores are not that well but she this might prove that she have a testing problem. Her attendance is great, that shows that she's committed to attend school and not slack. Her essay doesn't answer the real question because she talks about her mother and not about her, not only that its less than 500 words. Her letter of recommendation is good, it explains a lot about her. It explains why she is a little off beat. she is from a foreign country. Its good to know that she tries her best at doing work and that proves how far she has made it. Her activities only show that she was a member and its kind of disappointing that she wasn't a leader.Jasmine's SAT scores are a little below average which is not acceptable.

Now Kayla Serrano, she has a understandable transcript, she is also a competitive candidate. While looking over Kayla's transcript I noticed that her attendance/lateness is outstanding, she was only absent absent once through the whole high school years. She took intensive math, she was only weak in English. Her strength was definitly math because thats what she got the highest in. Kayla's essay was great, it had a good epiphany that flowed well and it answered the real question. Her activities does show "Breath." But she wasn't a leader she was a member. Kayla also wasnt a part of a elite sport or any other activity. The recommendation tells me that she has shown citizenship and "Faint Praise." Which is what we at are college love. She wasnt that strong on her SAT's, but she did make it in the middle. Overall her application was valid even though she was from Nicaragua.

In conclusion, it was difficult to choose but I have come down to pick Roman Polanco as are college student. I compared all of the applicants and Roman was the yellow light bulb that stood out. His SAT scores were almost perfect, his essay explained everything, and he showed leadership. His recommendation were "Faint Praise" and it was great. As an admissions officer Roman followed all the components of T.E.A.R.S of joy. I really liked how even though he was absent and late most of the time, Roman still showed an upward trend. That shows that he is ready to step up to the plate. I look forward to see Roman at are school Next year.