College+Applicants

As a admissions officer, I'm very aware of what student I chose to come to this college. I look for a strong essay from the student cause it can really explain like all the problems they might had have in the four years of high school. After the essay I like to see a good recommendation from that students college counselor because then they can explain how they was in class and outside of class and it can tell me all the good stuff about this student like if he/she was a leader. After that I would like to see their SAT scores for I can see what are their strength & weakness, and then when I'm done looking at their SAT scores I would see what kind of activities they did during high school and I would see if they did " Depth over Breadth". And lastly I would like to see their transcript cause to me that not really important.

When I was reviewing over Kayla Serrano the first thing that really got to me was her well written essay she had wrote. She really explain her self telling me that she new in the U.S and that she really wanted to study over here. Plus she had a really good hook that I wanted to see. And it had a epiphany that shows here before and after. The thing that I like the most about her essay is that it answers the real question it talks about her self.

Kayla counselor recommendation was really great cause the counselor is telling me that Kayla is ready and destined for college level. Plus it's telling me that Kayla was not from the U.S that why she can't speak good English. And it's telling me that even though she don't have that much activities but now it's telling me that she was involved in a lot of stuff out of the school.

Kayla transcript is really good cause she have only been absence 1 and never late to school. Plus she had really good grades through out the four years of high school. In addiction her activity was kind of bad cause she "Depth over Breadth" but the good thing is that she is working at Dunkin' Donuts and she started working in the 12 grade to help her family. Her SAT scores was below average besides the math.

When looking at Roman Planco his essay was pretty good it really talked about him self and how he had his epiphany. Plus it had a really good hook that really got me into the essay. I love how he have his before and I love how his spelling and grammar was perfect. Plus I'm glad that he didn't write a "spaghetti sauce essay" you can see that he really took his time when he was writing his essay you can see that he really looked over it.

Romans counselor recommendation was really not that good of a recommendation. Cause its only talking about how he is really trustworthy person and that he is ready for college. Plus it says that he had established a good repertoire with his fellow students. Furthermore his activity was pretty good he was a student ambassador for his school all 4 years of high school plus he became a leader of that club in his last year.

Romans transcript was not that good and not that bad. But the good thing about his transcript is that he had a upward trend and then he started getting good grades but the thing that made him go down is that his absence and lateness was really bad. His SAT scores was not good and not that bad.

When reviewing William Santos essay this is one of the worst essay I had ever read in my life. This is a poor essay I was hoping for more but he didn't even write a full 500 word essay. Plus in his recommendation the only thing its really telling me is that he only did good on the SAT it really not telling me if he is a good student.

William transcript is really bad the only thing that is good on it is how he had a upward trend and how he had good test scores. His activity is bad to he had "Depth over Breadth" and to me that is not a good thing after all i have seen. His SAT scores was really high it was above average and that is the only good thing I had seen from him. This student would not be going to my college at all.

When I was looking at Jasmine Duke essay it was okay but the only bad thing about her essay is that the essay is really not talking about her self and to me that a big problem she really didn't answer the real question. Jasmine recommendation was really good it really is telling me that she is a hard working girl that is ready for college. Plus its is telling me that she wants to be a doctor when she gets older and that is why she have really high grades in science and math.

Jasmine transcript was really good she had good grade though out her 4 years of high school. Plus she had good attendance/ lateness that is no problem for her. But a bad thing about her transcript is that she had a strong start but then she started to have a down ward trend and that really bad for me. Jasmine activity was really good she good she did a lot of activity in and out of school. But the thing that I didnt see is that she was not a leader for any of her activity. Her SAT are not good and not bad.

All in all Kayla Serrano is the strongest candidate for me. That essay was really good it was talking about how she was new in this country. Plus in her recommendation it was telling me that she is a hard working girl and that she is ready for college .Moreover it was telling me about how her mother left her here and she didn't know no English or nothing and it told me how she found work to help her family. The thing I like the most was how she never was late and she only miss one day of school out of her 4 years of hi school this a student that I would like to see in my college.