Najah+Joyner+comparative+essay

As an admissions officer at W.A.V.Y U., it’s very specific to me about what should be present in a student. What I look for is an awesome transcript, where the student’s grades are stunning. I choose the transcripts first because grades tell a lot about what the student does in their classes. Then I look for a long recommendation letter specifically about the student. Next I look for an essay about the student applying and no one else. Then I look for what activities that they take part in during their school year, and how long they've stuck with it. Lastly I look for their S.A.T scores. The S.A.T scores are last because one little test should not dictate whether the student gets into the school or not.

While reviewing William Santos, his transcript did not stand out to me. He was late 193 times and absent 100 times. There was only a little of an upward trend. In the beginning of the school year, William Santos had mostly 60-70 averages. Then in tenth grade William's average improved a little. It went to high 60s and low 70s. Then at the end of the school year Williams’s average improved to a 79 average in Economics and his highest score was a 96 in Algebra.

Williams essay was horrific. It was only one paragraph and an extra sentence. It was not really about what he did in school or any activities he did. There was no epiphany or before or after. His S.A.T scores were above average in all subjects and he only took it once. Williams’s recommendation letter was very small. It says he had consistent efforts, it was a faint praise. He did a little activity. When he was on the drama club in only the 9th grade, he played "Bubbles" in the play Oliver. He was on the soccer team in the 9th grade. Though he did some activities it was breadth over depth.

Jasmine Dukes essay was not at all impressive. The essay was more about Jasmines mother than about her. It did not answer the "real question." It was not long. It was not even an essay.

Though her grade is not impressive, her grades were good. She had mostly 80s and 90s throughout the year. But she could have taken more challenging classes. Her attendance was very spectacular. She was absent only once and but late twelve times. But what I really like about Jasmine Duke is that she did a lot of activities outside of the school. She was a member of the STEP Program and the drama club for all four years of high school. Which shows commitment? Also she was on the church choir for all four years of high school.

Jasmines recommendation was very good. It says she was from an immigrant family. It also says she was extremely hard working. It was about her character. It was a genuine recommendation. Though Jasmines grades were high her S.A.T scores were low. She had below average in every class even though she took it twice.

Kayla Serrano’s transcript was pretty good. She was a pretty average student. She was mostly strong in math and Spanish. She took honors Spanish and she took a college class at Hunter College in her 12th grade year. Her attendance was good also. She was never late and only absent once. There was a little of an upward trend throughout her year. Her regent’s scores are average. She only got one 69 and the others are above a 70.

Kayla's essay was really good. It told me a lot about her. If I didn’t read the essay I would not have known that she came from a different country and has to financially support her family. The recommendation letter was a genuine praise. It told me exactly why she struggled in certain class classes.

While reviewing Roman Polanco I found an upward trend on his transcript. He took advanced Spanish. He had strength in Spanish and math. He was late 109 times and has been absent 55 times. That is not really a good candidate to come to my school though his regent’s scores were great.

Romans recommendation letter was a good size. It said that he has a strong presence in the classroom. I look for a student who is active in the classroom who likes to participate. Roman had a good essay. But he didn’t have a great hook. His essay was about himself and no one else.

Roman did some activities when he was in high school. He was in Innovation Cares only in the ninth grade. He was the Student Ambassador member for all four years of high school and he worked in a taco shop eighteen hours per week. This shows dedication.

Of all students I pick Kayla Serrano. I pick her because she did well in all T.E.A.R.S. Also she came from a different country and still passed all her classes that required speaking English. Also she was only absent once, which shows that she will come to school.