David+Chilla+admissions+essay

David chila

 ESSAY  As an admissions officer, I am very clear about what is important to me in a student application. The recommendation is one of the most important to me because it tells us something a transcript does not tell us what a letter tell us about a close teacher they known since 9th grade. I look for a strong recommendation followed by a well transcript not perfect but good, and then essay.The activities are next in which I look because I don't want any lazy person in my campus i wan't a active person doing sports. The least important for me is the SAT because i't does not show anything only that you can take a test for 3 hours i need to see what you have done for the past 4 years in high school and see if you payed attention in class and not start to realize what you needed to do and i need something more to tell me about who the you are not a test.

 While reviewing Roman Polanco's application something that was outstanding was the upward trend on his transcript. His grades and attendance were not good they were terrible because he was probably lazy in class. The other problem was the attendance but he did better from junior to senior year. I't made more sense since his attendance got better his grades got better to. He should of not being absent a lot he could of passed classes with higher grade.

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 The essay Roman Polanco's wrote was indescribable. I'n the beginning of the essay he had a strong hook that caught me and made me want to read more. His story was like a movie you can close your eyes and you can relate to it. The essay did not have no spelling and grammar error so it was a take your time essay not a spaghetti essay. I't does answers the real question which is Does the essay tells us about you. =====

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 Roman Polanco was a member of student ambassador for all 4 high school years showing he could commit to one activities Depth over breadth. He also worked in Julio Franco's El Ricon and Restaurant and Taco shop. Roman showed commitment to the student ambassador and he worked a lot. The senor year of his high school year he became leader and i really like leaders. Lastly his sat scores were slightly below average in critical reading, math, and writing. His SAT scores was below average he almost would of passed it. =====

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When looking at Jasmine Duke's transcript what surprised me the most was her grades they were good she was on point in all her classes and her attendance was better than Roman Polanco. When looking at her activities she had a lot of things she did. The good thing about this was she stood in one activitie for all 4 high school years. She had below average sat score in all three sections. =====

The only problem with her essay is she did not say nothing about herself so we do not know what type of person she is. The real question was not answer. This was a spaghetti essay which was not carefully met with the criteria. It was really disappointing. Her attendance was good she was absence 12 times and late 1 time. Her SAT scores were below average but i don't really care about SAT scores if they were just below average.

I would of like to seen her do more challenging classes because she was good in every class. She never decreased with grades and it would of being better to have better attendance. Her recommendation was well explained by counselor. It explained her strength and weakness. The recommendation explained why she was not so good in her classes because of her coming to this country and learning English.

William Santos transcript was bad. It made sense why he had bad grade because of his attendance. He was always late in all four terms and instead of going up it got worst. I liked that he took advance class which was intensive advance math. He was not commited to one activity but in 12 grade he was founder of his own program which was inno zine. HIs essay was bad he did not take his time to write it he had time but he was probably not caring.

William Santos reccomendation is a faint praise because the teacher does not know what to write about him but she does not want college admissioners like us to know the bad thing about him. The letter does not say what his strength and weakness are so his recommendation was not what we wanted and did not pass our expectation.could have been better. His SAT scores were high they were 600 and above in all his SAT scores. If he would have done better in transcript it would of made it look better in his T.E.A.R.S.

The final candidate is Kalay Serrano and she had a good transcript not the best and not the worst. She did have strength and they were math in all 4 years and spanish. Here weakness were history and college bound but in 12 grade she had a upward trend. She was only absent once in all 4 years and that show commitment to school and she is serious about school. Her SAT scores were below average in all except in math. Her SAT scores was below average in critical reading and writing, but in math she passed average which was 520 in june 13 and net was november 13 was 510. She was only absence 1 all 4 years and it was great. It show that she liked school and it was a good thing for her transcript.

When reading her essay it made ne understand her transcript a little more because since she comes from nicaragua it is hard to learn a language. The essay has hook and epiphany and it was everything you would want in a essay. I was suprised when i saw that she did not do no activities only walk her brother to school each morning. Her region scores were below average except in math. Kayla took 3 advance classes which shows that college is going to be easy for here and she would have a great carrear. The candidate was good in everything except some classes. The recommendation was good it tells us what we need to know and it tells us something the transcript does not tell us.

After reviewing the candidates i had finally made a decision and it was a very hard too choose between all 4 candidates. The candidate i choose was kayla Serrano. I chose her over the 3 because she had a great transcript and her essay tells us why she was not so good in some of her classes. She was determine to learn english and to learn about the united state of americas history. I found the recommendation the most important because you can realie on the college counselor and it is something you can't lie about. The second important part of tear is the transcript. The transcript is the second most important because it shows what the student has done in her four years of high school. The third most important was the essay because it show what the person is capable of doing a essay on her own and not doing it at the last second. The fourth most important was the activities because it shows what they do on there own time not just staying home and playing xbox and ps3. The last important is the SAT because the are not that important and they just show what you can do in one day. I look for what you have done the past 4 years not one day.