Zachary+Craig+Admission+Essay

As an admission officer I ranked the TEARS as T.E.R.A.S.Transcript,Essay,Recommendations,Activities,and SAT. I like to see a student with a great transcript showing not bad grades but descent ones.A essay telling me a lot about them is something I look for.Then a recommendation that gives even more details about them and I like to know some of the activities their involved in outside of school.The SAT scores are the last.The SAT scores really aren't something I paid attention to because I feel they really are not as important.

While reviewing Roman Polanco application I saw that he has good and bad things about his transcript.Roman has an upward trend as a freshman and sophomore Roman didn't do as well.As he moved up to junior and senior year his grades got better.Also with his grades his attendance also got better from freshman year to senior year.While making a better improvement in attendance his grades improved as well.

Reading Roman's essay it was very good.At the beginning of the essay it had a great hook which made me want to read more.It told a great story of how and why he is where he is in life.It showed how much of a leader Roman is and inspiring he can be as a person.It was a pretty well written essay not really any spelling or grammar mistakes.It answers the true question behind writing the essay.Roman's recommendation really backed up his essay of leadership and that is very good.

Roman join the Student Ambassadors in freshman year and stay throughout to senior year.This shows a lot of leadership and that is very good.Being so committed with Student Ambassadors gave Roman the chance to become a Leader.The last thing is Roman's SAT scores he did very poor in all three sections.Better scores is something I would like to see.

I then took a look at Jasmine Duke's transcript.Jasmine's grades were very impressive she kept steady from freshman year to senior year.She seems to be a very strong student in grades.Something that could have made it even more impressive are more challenging classes.It really would have made a big difference with challenging classes.

Jasmine's essay wasn't as impressive as her grades.It really didn't much about as it did her mother.The real question was not answer. I really didn't learn much about other than how much she loves her mother.Also it didn't look as if she put in the time to write the essay.

I took a look at Jasmine's recommendation and saw that there is someone else that is impressed with Jasmine's work afford.Also I took a look at the activities Jasmine was participated in outside of school.She was part of a drama club for all four years in high school.She was very committed to it and that shows a lot of afford.Aside of drama Jasmine was on the church choir and made money babysitting.Jasmine's SAT scores were very low even though she had very good grades.I thought she could have done a lot better.

Looking at Kaylah Serrano's transcript I seen that her grades were up and down weren't very steady.She was pretty steady in Math and Spanish those seem to be her strongest classes.She even did good in them while taking Math at college level classes and Spanish at honor level classes in her senior year. Also while looking at her transcript I seen that Kaylah's attendance was outstanding and that is very good.

Kaylah essay was amazing because it told a lot.It had a hook that wanted me to just keep reading and I learn a lot about Kaylah.I learned that it was very challenging for Kaylah immigrating here from another country.She told how she was helping her family financially.Her recommendation even more like why she struggled in most areas.