Melina+maldonado admissions essay

Melina Maldonado 901

__**Comparative Essay**__ As an admissions officer I grade college applicants with the T.E.A.R.S method. This method is really transcripts,essays,activities, recommendations, and most importantly S.A.Ts. I feel in the tears method the most important from greatest to least would be transcript, activities,SAT test scores and finally recommendations. I feel that as a admissions officer that your Transcripts are most important along with your SAT scores because with your transcript it shows what you have done through out your four years of high school on to graduating to go into college and your grades show if the person as a student and applicant are ready to go to college and handle the material they will be given while in college and also through out life. I feel that the SAT scores are important also because say the person has the SAT scores of a -F and my college is for B+ average students and if your SAT scores are low they will slim your chances down as an applicant into getting into college because if the professors give you work and you wont understand then it affects you in life an academically.

When I looked at William Santos's I notice his transcript is not very strong it was through the 60-70s from 9th to 11th grade but in 12th there was only some minor changes. His SAT scores are very high on his transcript. His essay looks like it has been rushed and it does not have a hook. Williams activities show depth over breadth and like any other person he has chores which are walking the family dog and feeding it and also cleaning up after it which shows he is capable of important responsibilities. His recommendations from his teacher say hes a very bright young man and in the recommendation it shows faint praise from his teacher.

From another applicant named Jasmine duke her transcript shows an upward trend in 11-12th grade. Her weakness is English but its not that big of a weakness Her essay did not answer the real question it was only about her mother and her essay has perfect spelling and grammar.In activities it shows her was in drama club for four years. As for other activities she is her church choir. In her recommendations it shows that she is from an foreign family and the counselor strongly recommends her. Her sat scores are not very high except for math but everything else is somewhat below average.

Another applicant i look at is Kaylah Serrano and in the tears method she shows in her transcript an upward trend and she passes her classes with 70-80s she also took advanced classes such as intensive math. Her essay has a great hook and its answers the real question about her and why she wants to be in college and how she has grown through her high school years. The activities she has done shows she has worked before in dunking donuts its also shows depth and she had the responsibility of walking her brother to school so that shows she can be mature when around younger peers.Her recommendation show excellent student praise and it also tells me that she is a foreign student from Nicaragua. her sat scores shows that they are not really average and that she took them twice.

Another applicant I look at is Roman Polonco in the tears method his transcript shows he had an upward trend 80-90s but it also shows he was almost late 100 times. In his essay it shows that he did not have such a great hook but it shows his epiphany that he can be a leader.In his actvities it showed he worked with innovation cares and he is the student ambassador.In his recommendations it shows fain praise. In his sat scores they show that they are not that high.