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Michaelangelo Garcia My Comparative Essay

My review of T.E.A.R.S reflects that the most important aspects are the Transcript and Essay. Board of Admissions will review all grades for patterns, strengths and challenges in their decision making. Essays are very important as mostly all colleges want applicants to submit an essay with their application. The highest scores decide if you will get accepted to college or not. As an admission officer viewing a transcript can see how an individual worked hard in high school to accomplish their main goals. Activity represents participation in non-academic activities through out the year, which put a huge emphasis on individual identity. Recommendations show how well others perceive you which is a contributing factor. SAT's reflect current aptitude, instruction following and fulfilling the standard requirement. As an example, we shall overview the T.E.A.R.S amongst four students, Kaylah Serrano, Jasmine Duke, William Santos and Roman Polanco.

Kaylah's transcript reflects that her grades are average considering that she took advance classes, but yet passing, as she has always worked to be a 70's to 80's student. She also took honor and college level courses which is outstanding. She also holds a great attendance record. Her weakness is in Living Environment. Her essay reflects her maturity, but has no substance lacking a hook and epiphany. Her thoughts are scattered and deemed a "spaghetti sauce" type of an essay. She has participated in activities including working at Dunkin Donuts for two years, taking care of her little brother by walking him to school in the mornings and has been involved for a year with the Jamming Cares Club. For a student to have such fairly decent grades while contributing to get household by working and going to school is impressive. Her SAT scores were average and the probability of Kaylah getting accepted to a college or university is good.

Jasmine's transcript reflects strong grades throughout her academic career. Her essay never answered the overall question, which was to write about herself, instead she wrote about her mother, which is admirable, but yet does not answer the question asked; no hook, and no epiphany. Her activity showcases her dedication to the Drama Club for four years and singing in her church choir. Under recommendations she is from an immigrant family and sadly her SAT scores were not that high. She may have to re-take her SATs and probably eligible for a community college, but not a competitive university.

William's transcript reflects poor grades apparently due to lack of attendance, which is not a good indicator. To his credit, he did pick up his grades during his senior year. His essay was a few sentences and what he wrote makes him come across as being arrogant more than deserving of the opportunity, and it gave the impression that he didn't care to write anything worth while. His SATs were very high, but it would have been nice for him to shine in the essay portion. He holds participation in activities however they do not reflect anything of substance. The same holds true for his letter of recommendation, it lacks substance. He may have a difficult time with getting accepted.

Roman's transcript is impressive as he demonstrates his ability to do better over his HS career, as each year his grades got better. His regents scores are strong. He had the best essay because he answered the question, had no grammatical issues and shows perseverance. It had epiphany and was pleasant to read. He demonstrated loyalty and that he believes in the Student Ambassadors Club, reflecting an interest in politics by being a leader of the club. His SAT scores were a little below average however his activities show his charitable nature. His recommendation letter is consistent with all aspects of T.E.A.R.S. and is a great candidate for being accepted to a university.

I determine my attention to Kaylah due to the fact that she has good grades and also have a excellent attendance. She is a smart student and I will reccommend her to my college but SAT scores are below but I believe that she has strength on her self to do better. This individual's essay is very well writen even though it is interesting.