Kawan+Barnwell+Admissions+Essay

As an admissions officer I ranked the Tears 1.the essay 2.transcripts 3. recommendations 4.sat's 5.Activities The reason why i ranked them as they are is because i think the essay should be the most important because your talking about yourself and what you did and why you want to get into this school and that would be good to know about someone.Then i picked transcripts second is because its showing your grades starting from 9th grade into 12th grade and it shows if your grades are going up or down.Then is the recommendations because your getting something written about you from your teacher and it shows how you did in school and sometimes you don't get a real good recommendation but you get something that is called faint praise.Sat's are after because i think that test are really big but not as big because i think that you don't have to do test all the time.Last is activities because some school are not looking for what king of activities you have done but sometimes schools do look for that kind of thing and that is why i put it last.

Im reviewing Roman Polanco's application, and i saw that he was showing a upward trends from 60's and 70's and keep going up in his grades and they got better with time.Roman Polanco Sat scores were in the middle range so that means he did good but he could have done better than that because he was half way which is 400 or around that and the max score which is 800 makes it half so he did a half job and i say that make it a little hard because if he is in our school we cant have him doing a half job and not passing so im going to end this saying he could have done better.Now talking about clubs that roman participated in were student ambassadors which he was a member untill 12th grade and den he became the leader and the other clubs he was in he was just a member. Now on to his essay which is not bad because it talked about the struggle he had to go through and why his grades were like that in the first place and to me sometimes a good reason why you are always late to school and or not really doing your school work or home work. Romans rec really was not a good long one but he got a little bit of faint praise and that is not really good.Thats what i think about Roman and i end it by saying he could have done better.

Im reviewing William Santos and i have to say that his grades are not something that we are really looking for i because he has mostly 60's and 70's and it could be because he has been absent for most of the school year but then looking in 11th and 12th grade i see his grades rising and that means to me that he is a kid that was not doing well at first but he got his act together.He took advanced math in 11th grade since math is like one of his good subjects and Ela would be his second strongest.his essay had no kind of hook no kind of epiphany no kind of example and also no kind of growth.The activities hes in are drama club member of JV soccer team member of comic book club and etc. his rec only talked about how bright he is and also about his Sat scores. His Sat scores were high and almost there he was mainly in the 600's and that is good for him.