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Brendalys Anual Project essay

Brendalys Laza

904 February 7, 2012

__Essay__

As an admissions officer I ranked the TEARS as TERSA.I think that the transcripts are very important because it tells how the student was doing through out his four years of HS. Also it shows me in what subjects he/she was struggling on or very good at. It also shows me how many lateness's or absences they have and if they took challenges classes. Second I ranked Essays because I get to know why there interested in applying to my college, also it tells me more about the students who applying to my college.Third I ranked Recommendations because I think Rec's tell me there teachers point of view and they get the chance to tell us how well they know the student and how good they work in there classes with other students and if they are a fast learner. Fourth I ranked SATS as fourth because I find that some students might not do well on test as in other students and may have test anxiety. The least important to me would be Activities because knowing what sports you play I think is interesting which you can just talk about in your essay.

__In Reviewing Kaylah Serrano__, was excellent had Ranked her transcript a 5 because her transcript I had saw her grades and attendance were very good. Her strong subjects I saw were math and science. Kaylah didn't do so well on her regents. She had got mostly 60s and 70s,but also 90s. Kaylah Serrano's essay was good. I had gave her 4.5 because she had a good hook, which made me want to keep reading even more. She took her time writing the essay. It was not a spaghetti essay. Kaylah's Recommendation I give it a 5 because it told me that she took college level classes at CUNY Hunter College which was very interesting knowing that, but also her teacher told us her strengths and weaknesses throughout her 4 years of High school. In Her SATS she had got 400 in Critical Reading, 520 in math and writing she had got 450. Her SAT in math was a average score. I gave her a 3.5 because she didn't do well on them. Kaylah's Activities I give her a 2.5 because she didn't really participate in extracurricular in school,but she worked for 20 hours and still managed to come to school on time and do all her work.

__ In Reviewing Roman Polanco __, I saw that he was doing not so well through out his 4 years in high school. I Give his transcript 3 because he had good grades. He had 80s,90s ,but also 60s and 70s.His lateness in ninth grade were terrible he got 42/25. I give his essay a 5 because it had a great hook not only that a Excellent epiphany. He Became a leader after he leaded the cancer walk which opened his eyes. He was inspired, but his essay was perfect spelling/grammer it looked like he took his time. Romans Recommendation was good I give him a 5 because he accomplished all his goals and his recommendation said a lot just like his essay.He was trustworthy and it was Faint Praise.His SATS i give them a 3 because he didn't do so well on them. Last but not least Activities i give it a 5 he got extra credit in classes he worked ambitiously and was a cashier,Busboy and waiter at Julio's Franco's El Ricon Restaurant and at a Taco shop.

__In Reviewing Jasmine Dukes__, I saw that she was doing well in school. Jasmines Transcript was good I give it a 3.5 because she had 80s and above.Her attendance wasn't bad she was late like twice in ninth grade, but adding up all her absents of her 4 years of high school she has 12 in total and 1 lateness in tenth grade. In her Essay I give her a 1 because she didn't even have a good hook, or epiphany all she talked about was her mother, her whole essay was about her mom and not her. i expected to get to know more about her it seemed like if she wrote the essay in like a minute, it wasn't even 500 words. Jasmines Recommendation letter was a 4.5 i would say because it told me a a lot about jasmine and her behavior outside of school it also told me that she goes to Baruch College for the technology program. Jasmines Activities i give it a 4 because she participated in drama club, she was a babysitter for Lawrence and Darby Jett. She was also a Tour Guide. Her SATS were low she did not pass none of them and she went to take a Re-take on Saturday school and she still didn't pass.

__In Reviewing William Santos__, i saw that his transcript it wasn't good. i Give it a 2 because he had horrible attendance and his grades were 6Os and 7Os.Williams essay i give it a 1.5 because it looked as if he took 12 minutes just to write it also he didn't even talk about himself. i need to see more from him he needed to show more effort.His Recommendation i give it a 1.5 as well as essay because it tells me how he performs well when it come to academics, but his grades say a whole different story and i i think his recommendation could of been longer and more detailed. Next would be SATS i rank it a 4.5 he did so much better i didn't even expect his SATS scores to be so high.This doesn't tell me much i wish he could of explained himself more in his essay, but SATS score Excellent. His activities i will give him a 4.5 because he participated in many programs and clubs through high school.In twelfth grade he worked in the movie theaters as a ticket salesperson at Union square i dont find that job interesting, but if he loved his job then theirs no problem.

In conclusion I would chose Kaylah Serrano because i see her future really bright.she's very ambitious she had perfect attendance all 4 years. i didn't pick her just for her grades, but because i think shes someone who people can look up to and she works to help her family pay for rent and for food for her siblings that's a big responsibility. Although her SATS score were low, I really think its about how well they can work and I think shes ready for college.