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ashley logan

As an Admissions Officer, I ranked the TEARS in order of Transcript, Essay, Recommendation, Activities, and SAT'S. The order i made tears is important to me because i feel that the order i put it in was the important things first to me. the transcrips is most important to me because i feel that the grades of the students are very important. The second thing that is important to me is the essay. The essay is important to me because the student can tell me more about them, like there goals, what's important to them and the reasons why they should go to the college that they applied for. The third thing thats important to me is the recommendation. The recommendation is important because i can see if they are either a good student or not. I think the activities are the fourth thing thats important to me because i can see what that student did in his/hers spare time, And the SATS are the least important to me because i feel that you dont need to take the sats and that i just feel that its the least important. In reviewing jasmine duke's application, i saw on her transcript that she has very good grades with 70's and 80's and above. she has only 1 lateness/absences in the four years of school. on her essay, i notice that she doesnt answer the "real" question. she onlly talks about what her mother does/doing, nothing about herself. its sweet because its about her mother but not herself. also that she has good spelling/ grammer. the recommendation i saw about her talks about her strengths. for her activites, during the four years she did alot of activites far as clubs, programs, and sports. and far as community/ home activites, she only did in 11-12 grade. and her working experience, she worked as a babysitter, worked about 10 hours a week through 10th. grade, jan-june. and a internship, childrean's museum for science, her position was a junior tour guide, worked 30 hours a week during summer, 11th. grade going to the 12th. grade. now her SATS are ok. in reviewing kayla serrano application, i saw on her transcript that she was an good student with her grades and didnt have any lateness/absence's. her essay was good because she answerd the "real" question, and she has a good hook. in her recommendation, it talks about how much she has grown through the tough time's she had and that she was a good student, didnt do much activites in school but did some things outside of school. for her activites, she only did one club/programs/sports in 9th. grade. but the rest she did none. the community/home activities was walk younger brother to school each morning for 9-10th. grade and the rest is nothing. she worked at dunkin' donuts as a counter server for 20 hours per week through 12th. grade, january-present. for her SATS, its not good but then its not bad neither and i really think she could have done better. in reviewing william santos application, what i saw on his transcript was that he got 60's and 70's, and above throughtout the years. the lateness/absences was very bad. it has gotten worst throughout the years. on his essay, was very short, didn't put or talk about himself only what he would be doing when or if he goes to college. and he did not answer the "real" question. on his recommendation its talking about how hes a good student and how hes a good example of a exellent student but, it doesnt show it on his transcript. for his activites, during 9th. grade he only did two things which was drama club/ bubbles in the play //oliver// and tv soccer team member. did nothing during 10th. grade, film appreciation in 11th. and for 12th. grade, a comic magazine founder and a comic book club member. for community/home activities, for 9th-12 grade was to take care of the family dog: walk,feed,clean up after. and for his working experience, he worked at fanta's hardware as a stock boy for 12 hours per week, through 11th. grade for october-june. also at amc monie threter, union square as a ticket salesperson for 18 hours per week during school, 35 durning the summer through 12th. grade for june-present. and his SATS was ok. in reviewing roman polanco application, what i saw on his transcript was 60's 70's and above, higher throughout the years. although his lateness/absences was bad getting alittle better each year. on his essay he did answer the "real" question, and it has a hook in the first sentence, he inspired his friends talking about himself and the great things he did throughout his years. going through challenges too. i saw his essay was excellent. on his recommendation it talks about how well he does which is true and the challenges he goes through, how he's a hard worker and how he wants to accomplish his goals. for his activites he did two in 9th. grade which was the innovation cares club and student ambassadors as a member. two in 10th. which was still a student ambassadors and a adjude mel portuguese club with ester. for 11th. in a debate club and still student ambassadors. and for 12th. grade student ambassadors as a leader ambassador and a debate club.