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Olivia Minutti Comparative Essay

The essay component of the T.E.A.R.S is most important to me because that's when the applicant can express themselves and talk about them as a person. I also look for a average or an excellent transcript. I need to know if the applicant is enough capable to take the challenges my college puts on students. Another part I look for in the students application are the activities. For the activities I don't really look for the how many clubs, community activities, or jobs he was involved in I look for how committed he was to the activity. After that I also look for the letters of recommendations of the applicant. Besides the applicant telling me about themselves I also want to know the perspective of teachers about them. I want the person who is writing their letter of recommendation to elaborate more on the students strengths and weakness. To conclude, I don't really look for high or low SAT scores. In my opinion the SAT does not tell me much on the student.

While looking at the applicant Roman Polanco's essay he wrote an excellent essay about him, he wrote about his experience of when he organized a Breast Cancer Awareness Walk. He had a hook and a epiphany which made me want to know more about Roman. He had perfect spelling and grammer. It shows in his way of expressing himself in his essay that he took his time writing it. In Romans transcript what impressed me the most was his upward trend in his grades and attendance. He started of his freshman, sophomore, and junior year with low grades and terrible attendance but then in his senior year his grades and attendance improved a lot. Roman also had average regent scores which helped him.

Roman was not involved in any extracurricular activities. Even though he was not involved in any activities he had a job at "Julio Franco's El Ricon Restaurant and Taco Shop." Roman was committed to his job, and to me that is what count the most. He started working there in the 10th grade, and is still working there. Romans letter of recommendation elaborated more on his weakness and strengths. Lastly, Roman took the SAT's twice. The first time he took the SAT's his scores were a bit below average and the second time his scores increased very little and were still below average.

William Santos essay does not talk about him. To me it was terrible because it was not even an essay it was a paragraph. William only explained why he did not do well in his classes. Also William's transcript was also terrible his grades throughout all four years were 60's and 70's, and his attendance as well was bad. One of the things that helped William was his regent scores which were high 80's and 90's. In looking at Williams extracurricular activities I think he was not committed to one activity. He founded the Inno- Zine(Comic Magazine about a Super Hero) and then he was a member at the Comic Book Club, and Film Appreciation Club. William also had two jobs which he did commit to. I was also looking at Williams letter of recommendation and his counselor did not elaborate more on William as a person or on his weakness and strengths. To conclude, I was very amazed by his SAT scores. In all three sections of the test his scores were above average.

In reviewing Jasmine Dukes essay it was very inspiring but it does not answer the main question, it was not about her. Jasmine wrote her essay about her mother. Jasmine's transcript was excellent. Her grades and attendance was excellent throughout all for years. Her regent scores were average 70's and 80's.

Jasmine's extracurricular activities were not many but I liked that she at least spent her time after school doing something. She was committed to her STEP program and Drama club for all four years. She was also involved in her church choir and was babysitting. She had a lot more breadth than depth. Jasmine's counselor, talked more about her background and elaborates more on what she wrote on her essay and her transcript. I don't put much attention to her SAT scores but Jasmine did below average both times she took the SAT's. For the last candidate whom is Kayla Serrano, her essay was excellent. She wrote about a very difficult experience of hers and it had a great hook and epiphany which made me want to read more. Her grades were average, but her attendance was good. Kayla also took advance classes which tells me about her that she challenges herself. Her regent scores were also average they were from 65's to 90's.

Kaylah only had one job and no other extracurricular activities. She worked in Dunkin' Dounuts but she was committed to it because with her job she helped her aunt pay for rent and to buy food. Her commitment to her job made her have a lot more depth as opposed to breadth. Kaylah's letter of recommendation had great praise. It elaborated a lot more on her as a person. Lastly, Kaylah took the SAT's twice and both times she got below average.

After comparing all four candidates, the strongest candidate for this college is Kayla Serrano. Kaylah had an excellent essay, had an average transcript and shows she could take any challenge. I also chose Kayla because of her commitment to her job, to help her aunt. Her letter of recommendation elaborated a lot on her. Even though her SAT scores were low I do not take that into much consideration.