Aissata+Cisse+Admission+Essay

__Aissata Persuasive Essay__

__Aissata Cisse's Comparative Essay__

I Aissata Cisse a new admission officer, is clear about what is important in a student's application. I look for a strong application with an achievable essay, a genuine transcript with a upward trend. A persuading recommendation that will brainwash me, a tolerable activities list where I will see if the student is active, and a pleasant SAT's score.

As I analyzed William Santos application I've seen that his grades were lousy freshmen through sophomore year. Then suddenly I've seen an upward trend that really grabbed my attention. Although his attendance is drastic I believe that they need some work, they go worse over the years and I feel like he is a brilliant kid but he needs more encouragement for school. His SAT scores really grabbed my attention, and it seems as if his testing are abundant. His activities are satisfying and they show responsibility but, his essay was very unpleasant. He seems to be a little cocky and this is why I have said before that he needs to have some type of inspiration for school. While inspecting William's recommendation they show "faint praise". Which means that there isn't so many excellent things to say towards William. I feel as if William needs a vision towards school because he is very intelligent.

My overlook on Jasmine Duke was very amusing. She has nothing but 80's and 90's which really rejoice her transcript to me. She has no problem with attendance but absence which I feel like she has a well passing excuse for. Her standardized testing are decent and her SAT scores are below average. Her SAT scores I believe could have been much better according to her grades. I feel as if she need to be pushed a little harder for success on her tests. Her activities are outstanding and her jobs show maturity. Even though everything was flawless to me I found that she lacked a lot on her essay. She talked about her mother whom I believed she really adored but she hadn't answered the right question. After scanning Jasmines recommendation, they really brought me back up to my expectations for her. I am impressed on how she juggles her personal life with education and hasn't let that get in the way of her future.

Instantly as I reviewed Kayla Serrano's transcript I saw an upward trend. She has an accomplished attendance and that one absence must had an excuse for it. Her testing grades are worthy and I feel as if her strong subjects are math, she even took a junior math honors class which shows that she is trying. Her SAT scores are sufficient but looks as if she tried for both tests. I feel as if her activities are very flimsy and she showed breadth. But, Kayla's essay explained everything I really needed to know and it answered the right question. Her essay had the right hook and made me see how inspirational she can be. And at that her recommendation was really breathtaking with the essay. She is very interesting and I really enjoyed her transcript.

At last Roman Polanco my last candidate has one of the greatest upward trends but the attendance really wreaked up his chance for my college. How am I going to rely on someone to come to class when they have horrible attendance, that is really unacceptable. Romans testes are average to me and his SAT scores are a little below average too. Romans activities are superb, they show depth, leadership, responsibility, and commitment. I've seen that he has done some community service and both in freshman year.Also I've seen that he kept a job sophomore year to present and that shows great responsibility. His essay too was great and it was satisfying. It has the right hook, epiphany, and before and after moment. His recommendations shows some praise but not more than Kayla's.

So therefore my final outcome for these candidates I've chosen Kayla's. She shows an upward trend and has a well graded transcript. Also she has a really magnificent essay. Her recommendation also made me resit to not choose her for my college. She shows great maturity and participation. Therefore I've chosen Kayla to welcome and participate in my college.