Quajon+Avila+Admission+essay

====As an admission officer I rank the TEARS transcript first. I look for a very powerful transcript that is going to explain to me what the students was doing all 4 years in high school. secondly I also look for a well good explain essay that is most about a person and why they should be able to come to this college. Then I would like to see how those students did on they test. I think that the test is important because it can compare and contrast what they have done for 4 years and what the test average will be after the test. After the SAT"s I will choose the recommendation 2 to last because I would like to know what the teachers have to say but I would like to hear the students perspective. Lastly, I would choose the activities least because knowing what activities wouldn't really know the student academically.====

====When I was looking at Roman Polanco transcript I notice that he Standardized Test were pretty high and his test was better than he showed all 4 years. I also noticed by looking at his grades due to all 4 years he had and upward trend. From 60's to 70's from 70's to 80's and from 80's to 90's very impressive. Looking at his grades not only have he had an upward trend in those he also had an upward trend in attendance I love to see that in a student. Even though he grades and his attendance weren't as good as they should of been he said let me gain responsibility and integrity and start doing what i have to do to get out of here.====

====Roman Essay was fantastic. That's what I want to see in a student. Reading his essay I noticed that he had a good hook and that's what made it more engrossing. The way he had explained what he wrote just told me a lot about him like he is determined. The essay was well explained and also well written. I did not see any spelling or grammar mistakes inside of the essay. I also see that he was a good student from his recommendation from the teacher and his counselor. His counselor sounded sincere and gave him nice and genuine praise. It sounds like by the way they put it that he is a good kid a strong leader and that is what I really like in student.====

====Roman was a student ambassador for all 4 years while he was in high school and became the lead ambassador when he was a senior. He volunteered for a soup kitchen worker and was an employer. He styarted off as a bis boy and then he mov ed to a chasier to watier. He worked omn the weekends aand workede 10 hours a week. His SAT's scores wasn't impressive he was below our standards and the state standards. I was impressed with alot of things about Roman but his SAT's wasn't one of them. I think he could off done better.====

====Looking at William Santos iv'e noticed that he did poorly on his attendance. Every single year he was absent and late more frequently. He had an upward trend all four years and he took an advance math class. His activities wasn't magnificent I would give him a 4 out of 5. He wasn't really loyal to the clubs that he was in. It was depth over breadth. But he was a founder in one of the clubs he was in, in his senior year.====

====He did very well on his SAT's. He had gotten a 600 on his reading exam a 620 on his math and a 650 on his reading exam. He did very well. Also looking at his transcript I noticed that he did real well on all of his standardize test. He also was a strong candidate for this school. It shows me that he did really well in high school.====

====His personal statement was disgusting. He only had a paragraph. He did not have a good or an epiphany at all he gave him self faint praise and didn't explain enough about himself. The teachers recommendation and counselor 's rec really didn't give him a good genuine praise. They gave him faint praise they tried to tell something good about him but it seemed they couldn't.====

====Jasmine Duke grades was good all 4 years that she was in school. She mostly had 80's and 90's all 4 years and some 70's. She didn't take any advanced classes but her grades was "WOW"! Jasmine SAT's scores was terrible. From my point of view of course. I think by looking at her grades she could of done better. I think she has potential.====

====By looking at her transcript it looked like her Standardize Test was pretty descent. She have gotten 80's and 70's on each of them and she scored pretty high I think. Looking at her activities I see that she was a member of a step program in CUNY, impressive. She was also a member in 2 other clubs in tenth and eleventh. But i would like to see a leader and someone that is consistent in 1 club at a time.====

I am not interested in her essay. All that Jasmine did was talk about her mother. This is supposed to be a personal essay keyword (personal) and she talk's about her mom unacceptable. The rec's that are coming from her teacher's I can feel the love that they have in her. They gave her genuine praise and told me some stuff that she didn't.

Looking at Kayla Serrano high school transcript I can say that she had an upward trend