Hillary+Benedith Comparative Essay

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As an Admissions officer at Johnson university for high nursing school I think the transcript is mostly important to me because I could see their grades, their lateness and how much did the in pass four years of their high school years.Then I want to see their essay reason why I want to see their essay because it easier to get to konw them. Next is the recommendation letter because it let us knows from a teacher perspective.Then I look at their activities because it let me know how much active they did for four years of their high school.Then last is their SAT's scores are not that important to me because it just a test.

As a Admissions officer I love the way Kayla Serrano Transcript is going the reason why I love how the way her Transcript is going because she have good grades and her attends are good but been absence ones so that okay. I could tell she took some hard classes in 10th grade and also in 11th grade because she taken some high-level classes in her second and third year of high school. This tell me that she is a student that could do anything no matter what she does her best to get the good grades for classes. I really like what kaylah did on her essay because she wrote about how much she struggles in american and how much she misses her family and she would go outside and get a job to support her family in american also she tells us how much she hated high school on her first year because she spoke little bit of English and also she had a hard time making friends because none of them didn't speak the same language as she did.

I love the way her counselor wrote a recommendation about her because it show me how much she is a real hard working person when it comes to her grades and her family. And also she try her best on the classes she have hard time with. Her activity are SoSo she dose some home responsibility and after activities and she got this job call Dunkin Donuts she works there 20hrs a week she first started that job when she was a senor and now.Her SAT's scores are OK but she scores high only in math but it not that important to me because the transcripts, recommendation and activities are most important to me.

As a Admissions officer I' am really impress on how the way Jasmine Duke transcript is going she have good grades but she been late more then two times and been absence ones. From the way I'm looking at her transcript she have some strength and some weakness she have trouble with history and is really good at science because she get high grades in sciences and low grades in history. I as read Jasmine Duke essay it made me unhappy because she only worte about her mom and not herself when I gave her the question toward the essay she was sopost to write a essay about herself and not her mother this part of the essay that I read from Jasmine Duke is a disappointment for me. I love the way her counselor wrote about her as a hard working person and is a good student she also admired her mother because her mother work really hard to support her and her siblings. For the activity she did for the pass four years in her high school years are good she depth that means she stay in the same club for the pass four of high school and start to bread in the 11 grade by join in the knitting with claire club and she also got a job by babysitting and Junior Tour Guide she started babysitting when she was in 10th grade and stop her job over the summer. Then she started her other job at 11th and stop working at her senor year this made me think that Jasmine is a activate person but not that much. ON her SAT's scores she have a blow averages on her test their around the 400 but other then that she did good job on her transcripts ,recommendation and activities but not her essay she must work on her essay to order for us to get to know her better.

As a Admissions officer I'm very disappointment at William transcript he more lateness then ever and he been absence more then 25 times I wouldn't let William come to college because he would be coming to school late and yet failing all of his classes. This essay that I read from William was bad and table first of able you must have along essay you could have a short essay but it must be a paragraph from the way William wrote that essay is showing me that William is not welling to go to college and face the real world. I believe that William counselor is using too much fingering print and so I'm highly disappointment at William and his counselor. In his activities he been bread in the pass four years of his high school years then he doesn't do that much of the house responsibility even thought he did it but he only did it for four years of high school. And also he had a two job the first one was Fanta's Hardware and he was stock boy he work there for about 12 hours every week he started his job when he was in the 11th grade and also quite the job he had it for the other one which was the AMC Movies theater,Union Square he was a Ticket salesperson he works 18 hrs a week during school days and 35 hrs during the summer break he started working at that job in his senor year until now. His SAT's scores are very good he have his math,creating reading and creating writing round the 600's. I'm impress but not that much because he did poorly in his transcript, essay and recommendation but he did good on his actives so that the good thing I got from William.

As a Admission officer I'm impressed with Roman's transcript because he did poorly during 9th grade but he started to improve as he went on through high school and his lateness and absence are bad because he been late more then 42 times and also he been absence more then 25 times. Roman essay was amazing as I kept read on his essay I was supprised on the way he wrote his essay base on his experiment and how he love helping people and that keeps him alive by doing good deeds for people and he had a good obvious epiphany. I love the way his counselor wrote about and told every truth about Roman and how much he started bad but then he started to do good and that he helps out by join the walk for breast cancer and everyone was proud of him for doing something good. For his activity he did not that good one of the reason because for all four years of high school he keep breadth and also he did two house responsibility and got one job and that was Julio Franco's El Ricon restaurant and Taco shop he work as a busboy and as a waiter, he started working this job at 10th grade util now. Roman's SAT scores were okay; he got CR and writing in the 400's and math around the 500's because he pass math and fail writing and reading I could tell that he have strength and weakness.