Anthony+Chapel+Comparative+Essay

====As an admissions officer of "__ALCU"__ to us the must important part of "TEARS" is the transcript. The transcript is the most important because it tells us what you accomplished in about 720 days of school and how you improved in your classes. The second part of "TEARS" that are important to us is the essay because it give you a chance to WOW! us and tells us something we don't know about you. Also the essay can show us how you grown into something better after the epiphany you had in your essay. The next thing that's important to "ALCU" is the activities you did. Activities are the third most important because it shows us you are committed and responsible person. The fourth thing that's important to us is you recommendation, the recommendation is the fourth important because its not from you but it shows us what a teacher thinks about you from a teachers point of view. The last thing that's important to us is the SAT's because a lot of people agree the SAT's are biased. Also the SAT's just show me what you accomplished in 1 day on a test then what you accomplish in 720 days. But honestly all of the five "TEARS" are important in there own way so don"t really lack on one.====

For Roman Polanco the strongest thing about his College applicant to attend “ALCU” was his activities. His activities are his strength because he did plenty and was a leader by being the lead ambassador. Also it shows me he is a committed person because he worked and worked in the same job since 10th grade. The second thing that’s good about Roman’s application is his transcript. Even though he started slow he had and upward trend by 12th grade he was getting 80’s and 90’s. Also the regent was good most of his regent grades was in the 80’s. The only shaky thing about his transcript was he was late a lot so it had me think does he care about school? But as he got older the absences went down so I figure he started to care more as he got mature.

The next thing I liked about Roman’s application was his essay. His essay wasn’t the best but it answers the main question which tells me about him. The epiphany was pretty clear and the hook really drew me in. The spelling was wonderful and I can tell this essay wasn’t rushed he took his time. Personally I think Roman took the Advantage in a positive way to talk to the head of “ALCU” by taking his time with this essay. The forth thing I liked about Roman’s application was his recommendation. I can tell Roman’s counselor really took his time and had a lot to say about Roman as a student it wasn’t just faint praise. The counselor also tells me his strengths and weaknesses. So that shows me his counselor really pays attention to Roman. Lastly his S.A.T.s scores was the worst thing in this application. It was the worst because honestly it was below average except math which was just above average.

==== For Kaylah Serrano the best thing on her application was her essay. Her essay to me was the best thing in this applicants application because it had a great hook it really drew me in the epiphany was pretty clear. Also Kaylah answered the main question which tells me about HER!!! Next thing that was good in Kaylah's application to "ALCU" was her transcript. What stood out was she was only absent once in 4 year so that shows us school is one of her passions. Also on her transcript she mostly got 80's and 90's has her GPA for her classes. The only bad thing on her transcript was she passed her regents but did not do to good. The third thing that was good about her application was her recommendation. The recommendation stood out because it was not faint praise and the counselor actually had plenty to say about Kaylah. Kaylah's S.A.T.s was probably her fourth best thing. It wasn't all that it was below average but math which was slightly above average with a 520. The worst thing in this applicants application was to me her activities she really didn't do much but work at Dunking Donuts. This really worries "ALCU" because we don't really know if Kaylah is going to take advantage of all the programs we have or be a leader in are school because with her lack of experience in doing activities.====

For Jasmine Duke the best thing in her application is her transcript. She mostly got 80's and 90's and had and upward trend while becoming more mature. Also on her transcript her absence and lateness was really low so she comes to school. The second best thing on her application is probably her activities she did plenty but wasn't really a leader or stay with something. Next best thing on her application was her recommendation it tells me a lot why she might struggle in her English classes. Also her recommendation tells me she is dedicated and hard working which or two qualities "ALCU" likes. Next thing we didn't really like was her S.A.T.s scores. I mean I understand she's not from this country but if you taking the S.A.T.s you should at least score above a 500 but all her scores was below average. Jasmine Duke's Essay was really one of the worst essay's I ever read. I mean her essay really ruined her chances to attend this university. It wasn't 500 hundred words, didn't answer the question, no hook and sadly no epiphany.

For William Santos the best thing on his application was his S.A.T.s scores. All of them were in the 600's so it was above average but not enough to get into the prestige schools. The next best thing was probably his transcript. He started with 60's and 70's but had and upward trend so as he got older he became more mature. Also had great regent's scores but was absent a ton of time in his 4 years of high school. It wasn't to good but the next best thing on his application was his recommendation. I can tell it's faint praise so that worries me but it tells me he's a great test taker so he must studies and that shows me he some what cares for his grade. The next thing that I didn't really like was his activities. He kind of bounced around a lot and didn't stick with one but did a few activities and had two jobs in his four years of high school so it shows me he can go out and find something he wants. William Santos essay is probably the funniest essay I have ever read. It was honestly about two sentences which is horrible. Also his essay has no epiphany, no hook and really doesn't tell me anything about him or why he wants to go to are university.

The candidate I picked to attend 'ALCU" is Roman Polanco. Honestly I know he was absent a lot and had poor S.A.T.s scores but I think as a person you can work on that. Also by looking at his transcript I can tell he tried to work on his absences by looking at his first year being absent 25 times to being absent 5 in his senior year to me that's a huge improvement. Also I know in college their will be big test but he will just have to take advantage of his opportunities by asking teachers and colleges mates to help him study. Another reason I picked Roman to attend this university because he's a leader and this university loves leaders because leaders work harder and give their best everyday and don't waste time. The last reason I picked Roman to attend "ALCU" because he had a great essay I was honestly impressed with his writing.