Sugey+Orea+Admissions+Essay

As new admission officer, I know what is important in a student application. I rank the tears this way, I look for good strong passing grades and upward trends in the transcript, I look for a strong, well writing essay, I want the essay to tell me there development in the past four years and to answer the real question, I look for leaders, and students that has a death over breath in the activities. I also look for a letter that tells me how he does in class and what his strength and weakness in a recommendation, and lastly I look for SAT's, in my opinion SAT's don't really matter for me because I feel that a test don't tells me enough information that I have to know.

As I look at Roman Polanco transcript. I see what I was looking for. I can see an upward trend in his grades. In the beginning of his freshman year his grades weren't so good but he was passing. He mostly had 60's, 70's and 80's, but in his senior year his grades went up to 90's. His grades reflected his attendance and lateness. In his freshman year he had a lot of absences and lateness but in senior year he had less lateness and absence. His strength was math, English and science, his weakness was social studies I can see that he develop mature himself and had more responsibility by the years.

Roman's essay was a strongly good. It was a really interesting story. His hook caught my attention and made me want to keep on reading. I like how the essay talks about whom he really is, that he can be a leader and how he developed it. The essay is well writing with perfect grammar and spelling. Furthermore, Also Romans activities sheet was great. I like how he focuses on being a student ambassador. I also love how he became a leader of a student ambassador. I love leaders! These made me think that Roman was really responsible and can become a leader in college. Roman not only joined that activity but he was a member of the other activities as well, he worth his time instead of goofing around.

Romans recommendation was good. It talks about many things that I suppose to know about him. Such as what he does inside the classroom, roman has a strong presence actively participating and contributing to class discussions. He is not the best student in class but he tries his best and the most likely reason for it is because he is a late bloomer. This essay is not a "faint or praise", it talks many good things about him. Lastly I look at Sat's. I’m not a big fan of Sat's because I believe that a test won’t really talk about him, but he did OK in the test. In Critical reading he got 480, in math 510, and in writing 490. His average was about 500.

Furthermore, as I look at William Santos transcript I can totally notice an upward trend from his sophomore year to his senior year. In is sophomore year he had 60's and 70's, but he did a upward trend in his senior year to 80's, 90's and one 70. This means he developed threw the years. On the other hand William did a downward trend in his lateness and absence. This reflected his grades. Each year the problem of lateness and absence increased more. William strength was English and his weakness was science.

William Santos essay was bad; it was not a good essay. It showed me that he wasn’t ready for college, that he don’t work hard to accomplish a assignment, and that he was not responsible. William's essay had no hook. It didn’t talk about how he'd grown in this past years. The only good thing is that it had good spelling. This essay did not show me what I was looking for. William actually did some activities. He was a founder at a club but he wasn’t a leader. He had no depth over breath. He could have done more clubs thou.

William did not have a good recommendation letter. I didn't found what I was looking for. I dint found what he did inside the class room or what is his strength or weakness. I only found about his character that he is a very bright young man with good Sat's scores. This letter was "faint praise". Lastly I look at his SAT's. He has good passing grades, but it doesn’t really make sense based on his grades. In Critical reading he had 600, in math 620 and in writing 650. His average was about 630.

As I look at Jasmine Dukes transcript I can totally see that she has good grades. She has 80's 90's and one 70. She looks like she is a smart. She has constant staid with those strong grades since her sophomore year to her senior year. This shows that she is a excellent smart student, that gets on task, and doesn't fools around. Her strength is math, science, and English. Her weakness is social studies. There is no problem with her lateness and absences, I can understand that this reflects on her grades and since she does comes to school and actually does the work.

Jasmine Dukes essay wasn't the best. I'm surprised because it doesn't make sense that she has good grades in English but yet she doesn’t has a well writing essay. Her essay doesn't answer the real question about her. It doesn't talk about her, it talks about her mom. This essay didn't had what I was looking for, I don't see a hook, and i don't see how she has developed threw out the years. Furthermore, Jasmine Dukes has done many activities. Jasmine has been in the drama club for all her high school years. Although she didn't became a leader she had depth over breath. She also joins the knitting club and did community service in a church by reading scriptures.

Jasmine recommendation letter had good information about her, it told me several things that i needed to know. It tells me how she does in class. She tries her best on her assignments, from a small homework assignment to a mid-term exam. or a major paper, but I’m concerned that if she tries her best on a major paper she could of done the best on her college essay. Her essay also tells me about her citizenship, that she is well liked and respected. Finally, her SAT's wasn’t the best, maybe she has test anxiety because in her class grades she has good grades and that didn't reflect on her test grade, but SAT's aren't really important for me. On Critical reading she scored 430, on math 470, and on writing 410. Her average was about 430.

Lastly as I look At Kaylah Serrano transcript I can see that she is smart because of her good grades. She mostly has 70's, 80's and 90's. Her lateness and absences are really good. She was only absent once in 10th grade. Although I think Kaylah could have done better class grades since she was always in school and early. Maybe she didn't put too much effort, but I still think she is a strong student. Her strength was math and her weakness was social studies.

Kaylah essay was great. I really enjoyed reading it. She had a really good strong hook that got me to keep on reading. While I was reading I felt that I was feeling her excitement on coming to a new place and discovering a new culture and new people but at the same time that feeling of leaving my family and friends. I liked how she answered the real question that I want to know, she said who she really was. It also has good spelling and grammar. Furthermore, as I look at the activity sheet I got wasn’t satisfied at all. She only joined jamming cares club in 9th grade, she did home activities by walking her younger brother to school in 9th and 10th grade, and she worked on Dunkin donuts on 12th grade. I’m concerned on what she did on 11th grade. She is not a leader and don't have depth over breath.

Kaylah recommendation letter tells me a lot about her.. Inside the classroom she demonstrates exceptional ability for someone operating a different language. Her letter is not faint or praise. Her strength is mat and Spanish Kaylah SAT's scores were okay. On Critical reading she scored 400, on math 520, and on writing 450. Her average was about 430. Although I’m not a fan of SAT's I think she did well.

In conclusion, as an admission officer i think that Roman Polanco, William Santos, Jasmine Duke and Kayla Serrano all have different weakness and strength. I select Kayla Serrano. I choose her because she has many things that I’m looking for. For me, transcripts are the most valuable than anything else in tears and Kayla transcript was good. she had good passing grades even though I think she could of done better based on her record on lateness’s and absences. The second valuable tear for me is the essay. Kayla really did a good essay, it looks that she really took her time to do this and didn't rush. The third valuable tears for me is activities, all I wasn’t satisfied on her activities sheet I think that it was one of her struggles and maybe she didn't had time for it. The fourth valuable tear for me is the letter of recommendation. Kayla had a good letter that told me many things about her and it wasn’t faint or praise. Lastly the last valuable tears for me is SAT's. They weren’t the best scores but she at least passed. I suggest that Kayla Serrano is going to be a good student on college