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As a admissions officer I ranked TEARS by the Transcript 1st ,Essay 2nd ,Recommendation 3rd ,S.A.T.S 4th ,and Activity last.Why i put Transcript first is because i want to know there grades an how they had improved from freshmen year to senior.Also how many day they been late for each year.Essay was my second choice because i want to to know you an what you are interested in and what you do for your free time. I was mostly impressed in Jasmine Duke hard work in high school.Why because she had got very good grades in all four years of of her high school years since freshmen year to senior year. Jasmine is a high 80's an low 90's student.She was only late only 12 times in all her years in high school and only absence 1 time in all four years an that year.So I say she has a good Transcript.In the Activity she was good in because she had been a member in the Drama club all four year an she never switched clubs each year. She stood in the Drama club.Jasmine because a employer for Babysitting's Museum for science and Children in 10th grade from January to June.Also was a Church choir for four years and scripture reader for two years from 11-12th grade. I don't like that in Jasmine Essay is that she had not talked about how she was doing good in school.Also how she did not talk about the Activities she had did in high school or about her life so i can know a little bite about you and why you want to go my college.All you talked about was your mom an how she a good roll model in your life but I don't want your mom in my college i want you so i needed to know about you.Your Recommendation was every good your teacher said how you was a good student.AN how you took enrichment classes for Math and Science also projects involving Chemistry an Physics. Which i was very impressed in and how your teacher strongly recommended you to come to my college. Your S.A.T scores was a ok because you scored 410 in CR and the second time you went up 20 points an got a 430 in CR.In Math you scored a 450 an the second time you went up by 20 points again an got a 470,an in Writing you got 440 an the second time you went down 30 point which was not impressing to me. Kayla Serrano she has a good transcript why because she has high 70's,high 80's an high 90's in all four years of high school.I was also impressed because she had never been late in all of her four years of high school but she was only absence once in all her four years of high school.I was also very impressed by your Essay why because you had talked about your grades and school.A your summer job in Dunkin'Donuts and how you were tired because you worked 25 hours a week but you still went to work.An also how it was hard because you knew very little english but you c stilled passed your classes wif high 70's ,80's and 90's. For your Activity i don't like how you was in the jamming care's club for one year then went to young walkers club the next year.Impressed that you had a good Recommendation from your teacher. Why because you have taking college level classes at CUNY Hunter college.Also your most comfortable classes were Math and Spanish.Your S.A.T's Impressed with your first S.A.T scores why because you scored a 400 in CR and the second time you dropped 10 points so you got a 390.I was not so impressed in Math you got 520 why because that was a class you were good in but you still dropped by 10 points an got a 510 but in Writing you go a 450 which was good but you dropped 40 points and got a 410. William Santos for your Transcript i was not so impressed but your grades are average you got some 60's ,70's,and some 80's but a lot more 60's.Why because you have not been in school a lot for freshmen year you were late 33 time an absence25 time which is no good and 10th grade you were late 40 times an absence 32 time for 11th grade you were late 45 time and absence 23 time an for senior year you were late 70 times an absence 20 time i was every disappointed.I was impressed in your activities why because you were a founder in the 12th for Inno-zine comic magazine.Also from you 9th grade to your 11th grade years you been going to a lot of different groups which was not so good.Your Essay was not impressing why because it was not a 500 word essay. Also you did talk about your classes an how the work was boring an u will come to class on time if you were in me college. For your Recommendation your teacher talked about how you had every good S.A.T scores.Your S.A.T scores I was very impressed why because you scored CR you got a 600 and for your Math you got a 620 and for your Writing you scored a 650 so i was very impressed. Roman Polanco your grades were good why because you got a lot of high 70's an low 80's an mid 90's on you Transcript. what i don't like was how you were late an absence a lot in all for year of high school.For your Essay i liked how you talked about how you talked about what you did on your Activities and how you change a lot of people's mind on supporting sick people. But your essay was more then 500 word but it was a very good essay.For your Activities i don't like how you were going from group to group each year and you were in a lot of groups. But you were not a founder in any thing but leader in student ambassadors.Recommendation your teacher was very happy to write about you an how you did good in your classes and activities and S.A.T scores.S.A.T i liked how you went up in your S.A.T scores like in CR you got 450 an the second time you got 480 you went up 30 points,Math you scored a 490 an the second time you got a510 so you went up 20 points, and in Writing you got a 470 an you got a 490 the second time an went up 20 points. Out of all 4 candidates i would have to keep Jasmine Duke.Why because she had a very good Transcript and i'am more interested in your grades. and she had mid 80's and low 90's.