Darius+AldamuyAdmissions+Essay

//As an admission officer i ranked the TEARS: Transcript, Recommendations, Essay, Activities, Sat's. I put the TEARS in that order because really I think the Transcripts are the most important because it shows your grades for all four years of High School, shows your absences and how many times you have been late. I think the Recommendations are second most important because we need to know what the teachers think about the students. I say the Essay is third most important because you have to spend the most time on, you have to write a story that made you change in life if you was messing up before in life or school. Discuss when you had an epiphany. I say the Activities are the fourth important because Colleges want to see how/ what activities you have been doing. Becoming a captain means that the colleges see that you are becoming a leader instead of a follower. I say that the Sat's are the least important because all it does is just test you on what you have learned before and some colleges don't even care about the Sat's that much.//

//While looking at Kayla Serrano's transcript I noticed that she had very good grades 70s-90s 9th-10th grade. She had outstanding attendance. I was most impressed by Kayla's algebra and geometry grades, she had 90's every year of High School. I just only disliked Kayla's Essay, because she wrote about how her mom left her in New York City. She had a Hook. An Epiphany and a Realization. Only thing she could have did better was writing more about her. Kayla Serrano had an upward trend, which means Kayla's grades went up and higher every year. Kayla's Sat's scores were not the best. Her scores in CR were slightly below average. Sat's score in Math were slightly above average. Her scores in Writing was slightly below average.//

//While looking at Jasmine Duke's transcript i noticed that she had an Upward Trend. She had good but not great attendance. She had slightly below average scores on her Sat's. CR: 410 Math: 470 Writing: 410. Honestly I will accept her into my school because she has all 75-90s in high school for all her years. I dislike how Jasmine only talked about her mom in her Essay she could have said a story about her or what happened in her life. I really liked how Jasmine Duke had an internship at the Children's Museum for Science. She was a member of the Drama club for all four years of High School. //

After reviewing William Santos Transcript I noticed that he had an Upward Trend, William had 70s-90s. On his Sat's his scores were above average. I noticed that he had horrible attendance. William Santos was apart of his High Schools JV soccer team only for his first year of High School. William was a member in the comic book club. William Santos essay was absolutely horrible. NO hook. NO epiphany.

 While looking at Roman Polanco Transcript I noticed that Roman had a Upward Trend. His Sat scores were slightly below average. he had 65's-90's. Roman had poor attendance the first three High Schools. Roman Polanco's Essay was great. I loved it. Very Interesting, I noticed a hook and an epiphany. Roman got very good recognition from his counselor in the recommendation. Roman was the Leader of the Student Ambassadors in the twelfth grade. He was also apart of the Debate team eleventh and twelfth grade. He was also apart of the Innovation Cares Club.

After comparing  all of the candidates I think I would like to accept Roman Polanco. I was absolutely most Impressed with Roman Polanco's transcript and Essay. he had an Upward trend just like most of the candidates. he might of had a lot of lateness and absences but he had the grades to make up for it. He was in the Debate team which shows he can back up what he says. He was a leader in the Student Ambassadors which shows he is more of a leader than a follower. Roman has had alot of work experience. Therefore I will love for Roman Polanco to be in my University.