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Juliana Suriel Admissions Essay

As an admissions officer I ranked the TEARS Essay, SAT's , Transcript, Recommendations, && Activities. I ranked the essay first because it was always difficult for me to write an essay, i would either did not know what to write or not have enough information to write it. Then i ranked the SAT's second because every time i would study for a test i would easily get distracted. After that, i ranked the Transcript third because that's where they put the grades, & i'm failing some of my classes , so it not easy for me to pass my classes because i do not like doing homework. I ranked recommendation fourth because i do not get along with most of the teachers in this school. Lastly i ranked activities last because its easy for me i love doing activities.

In reviewing William Santos application, i saw his grades he had an upward trend in 11th grade to 12th grade, but he did not do so good in his freshman & sophomore year. Then i seened how many times Santos was late & absence in all of his 4 years in High School not impressive at all. Also he did very good in his SAT's, he scored 600's in all of them. Polanco's essay was unacceptable, it was very short & it doesn't even talk about him , he talks about his grades. Polanco joined the drama club in the 9th grade he played "Bubbles" in the play Oliver, & was a member in the JV soccer team in his freshman year. In his senior year he became a founder of a club named Inno - Zine (comic magazine about a super innovator. For home activitiesin his 4 years of high school he took care of the family dog: walk, feed, & clean up after. Lastly, for his work experience he was a stock boy, 12 hours a week for his junior year & he was a ticket sales person in his senior year , 18 hours a week during school , and 35 during the summer.

While reviewing Jasmine Duke's i saw her lateness / absences was really good he was barely absent & he was never late only 1 time in his 4 years of high school. Her grades was really good she had an upward trend, she has 80's & 90's, but her SAT scores where really bad , she took the test twice and still had bad scores she was in the 400's. Jasmine's essay was not good she did not write 500 words she wrote less than that. Jasmine also did not write about her she wrote about her mom which is something she was suppose to write about her self. For activities Jasmine was a member of the step program for all through high school which is good. Then joined the Knitting with Claire Club in both her junior & senior years. For community she joined the church choir for his freshman, sophomore , & junior years. She was also a scripture reader for his junior & senior years. For work experience she was a babysitter in his sophomore year. She would work 10 hours a week. After that, she was a tour guide for the summer of 11th grade going into 12th grade. She worked 30 hours a week which is good. Lastly, her letter of recommendation it says very good things about her like she is a extremely hard-working student & a consistent member of our community.

In reviewing Kayla Serrano application, I was most impressed with her lateness / absences, she was only absence once in all 4 years of high school. Her grades are good she has 70’s, 80’s, & 90’s. I noticed how Kayla did not get good scores in her SAT’s. while looking at her Senior Activity sheet, I saw Kayla joined the Jamming Cares Club in her freshman year. For community she would walk her younger brother to school each morning in her freshman & sophomore years. Then for her work experience she worked in Dunkin’ donuts as a counter server, 20 hours a week , 12 grade , January to present which Is good. I liked how Kayla wrote about herself in her essay, but its too long. Lastly, her recommendation letter stated she’s really focus on what she is doing & she is an excellent example of a student who is destined for success at a college level.

In reviewing Roman Polanco's application, I saw his grades & there were not impressive in his freshman year, but his grades got higher every year. One thing i really disliked was how many times he was absent & late in the 4 years of high school. He was late & absent more than enough times. Another thing i disliked was Roman's scores for his SAT's. He took it twice & still got bad scores. I really liked how Roman was a member of the Student Ambassadors club for freshman, sophomore, & junior years & was the leader of the club in his senior year. He was also a member of the debate club in his junior, & senior years. I liked how he was a soup kitchen volunteer in his freshman year. For Roman's work experience he worked in his sophomore year to know, he was a busboy, cashier, & a waiter in the Julio Franco's El Ricon Restaurant and Taco Shop. He would work 18 hours on weekends. Roman's essay is really well written, i liked how he tried to put up a Breast Cancer Awareness walk, but it's too long. Lastly, his recommendation it said he was a very strong leader, a valued member of the innovation community, & he was one of the most reliable students at the school.