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Greetings my name is Elaine Kearse, I am the new administrative officer for Wavy University. I am here to evaluate four applicants applying to my University,Roman Polanco, Kaylah Serrano, Jasmine Duke, and William Santos. I am reviewing all four of their T.E.A.R.S, such as their transcript, essay, activity log, recommendations, and their S.A.T scores. The transcript basically is their average score in each grade for all four years from their high school. Their essay is their chance to directly talk to me and other admission officers and show us their personality but, most importantly to answer the one big question, who are you? Their activity log is a chance to show us if they are founded members of a club or team. This let's us see, if they are stable members in their clubs/teams or are they nomadic members in clubs/teams for their high school. Recommendations help us to know who were they in high school. By looking at their recommendations we can see how other teachers or counselors viewed them. Lastly, their S.A.T scores help us to understand how good they are in studying for huge tests and if they learned the work in their high school. I evaluate their T.E.A.R.S in the order of S.E.R.T.A. Which means their S.A.T's are first, Next is their essays, then there is their recommendations, finally their transcript, and lastly their activities. I ranked their S.A.T's first because I feel if they got a high score that means they learned the material in high school and they studied. Studying to me is an important factor in college and if you can't study and get a good grade on a test on material you already learned, how can you prepare for high school? The next factor I take seriously is their essays. Your essay allows you to introduce your self as a person to me and other admissions officers so we can figure if your the type of person we want for our school. The next important factor is their recommendations. The recommendation allows us to see how other counselors and teachers viewed the applicant. If they didn't view this person in a good way this allows us to see if we want a bad viewed person in our school. We have to be careful with the type of people we put in our school because they can mess up the college atmosphere. The next important factor is the transcript. I really don't take the transcripts seriously because their grades might not be great but they can be great students for our school. Lastly, the factor that I don't take very serious is their activities. I believe that just because they entered a lot of clubs and never really stuck to one doesn't mean anything they can be experimenting with what clubs they like the most.

The first applicant I will be evaluating is William Santos. On William's transcript he has alot of 60's, 70's and 80's from 9th to 11th grade. In 12th grade he got 70's, 80's and one 90. This to me is not good because it seems like he decided to finally get good grades at the last minute when he should have been doing this starting freshmen year. William's essay is horrible and he does not seem motivated to work hard. He is what we consider a "know-it-all" but knows absolutely nothing. In addition he doesn't tell us who he is a person he instead tells us he is ready for college.He founded his own magazine in school and joined a couple of teams. In addition he had 2 jobs from 11th-12th grade. His counselor gives him, "faint praise". He states how good the student is but it doesn't show through any of his documents. Suprisingly William had got above average scores on his S.A.T.'s. This indeed makes me like him a little more. ( CR: 600, M: 620, W: 650 )

The second applicant I will be evaluating is Roman Polanco. Romans's transcript is not great but good. He definetly shows an upward trend throughout his high school year as a student. He ended his 12th grade year with mid-80's and 90's. Roman's essay is very well written. He tells us a story about his time as a leading ambassador for his school. He teaches us about who he as a person and how he will fit in as an exceptional student in our school His essay has a great hook and even a clearly stated epiphany. He captured my attention started with his first sentence.He was a member for a couple of clubs including the student ambassadors where he was the leader. He also volunteered a alot and maintained a steady job since 10th grade. He had a great recommendation from his college counselor Arthur Samuels. It also explains how Roman is a late bloomer but is willing to work hard to succeed which lead him to be one of the top students in his senior class. One bad thing is that Roman scored below average on the S.A.T's and I take the S.A.T scores seriously but in all other areas he did very well.

The third applicant I will be evaluating is Jasmine Duke. On Jasmine's transcript grades she got only 80's and 90's. She does not show an upward trend. In her essay she did not do well at all. She told us about her mom and not herself. She didn't answer the question which was, who Is she as a person. She was a member of the STEP Program at CUNY College all four years. She was in church choir in 9th grade to 11th grade. She did 2 other clubs as well during high school. She also babysat in 10th grade and got summer job in 11th and 12th grade. Her recommendation was very well written by her counselor and was excellent overall. She seems to be a very good person due to her recommendation letter. Although she has below average S.A.T scores. ( June 2013 CR: 410, M: 450, W: 440) ( Nov 2013 CR: 430, M: 450, W: 410)

The fourth applicant I will be evaluating is Kaylah Serrano, Kaylah's transcript really doesn't show an upward trend. She has a wide range of grades between 70's-90's. Even though I haven't evaluated any other applicants attendance Kaylah's attendance is remarkable, she has only 1 absence and no lateness. Her essay was very well written she discusses a major transition in her life when she decided to emigrate to the U.S.She answered the major question which was who was she as a person. Although when I reviewed her activity log she really hadn't done anything. She joined only 1 club in 9th grade. She walked her younger brother to school each morning in 9th and 10th grade and had one job in the 12th grade. The recommendation that we recieved from her counselor was very well written and she was greatly mentioned in the letter. It wasn't faint praise either. She has below average S.A.T scores but she took them twice. ( June 2013: CR: 400, M: 520, W: 450. November 2013; CR: 390 M: 510, W: 410.)

Many things determined my final decision for who should be apart of Wavy University. After reviewing all four applicants I finally came to a conclusion. The person I chose was Roman Polanco. Roman didn't have the very best S.A.T scores but he did make up for it in all other areas. I do indeed find S.A.T's scores extremely important but Roman has the ability and chance to lack in that area cause he made up for it in other areas. I really don't know why I like Roman honestly but he seems to be the person that will fit into our school. Sometimes stuff like this happens, you just get a feeling that someone is or has that X factor that you have been looking for, and in my opinion Roman Polanco has it more than any of the other applicants.

//__Elaine Kearse__// Admission officer