Gilmariana+Tossas+Admissions+Essay

====As an admissions officer I ranked the TEARS transcript. At first I look at the grades, which is very important to me because I want to see which classes are their strengths and their weaknesses. Also. I would rank the essay because it tells me more about them. I would also rank activities because it shows me what the students do outside the school. Recommendations shows me what the teacher think about the students and it tells me how that student have grown in four years. Lastly S.A.T.s it show me if that that student did very good in their transcript, they would also did good in their S.A.T.s====

====In reviewing Roman Polanco's application, I saw that in his transcript he started with bad grades, his grades were with 60's and 70's in freshman year. But then I was shocked because I wasn't impressed how his grades were looking at first but then, it shocked me how during the junior year and in senior year his grades went up. It showed me that Roman was lacking off at the beginning but then he started to realized that his grades was very important to colleges.====

====Roman essay was very good. It was excellent. His hook got my attention. He had no spelling or grammar mistake. I felt like if he i knew him already! Futhermore, his recommendation letter answer all my questions about him. Roman participated in Student Ambassador for all four years. He would start one thing and stick with it. At senior year he became an Ambassador. Overall, Roman SAT scores was a alright average in all three sections even though he could have done better.====

====In looking at Jasmine Duke's application, I was very impressed with her grades because she never dropped on her four years of high school. Her grades showed me that she's a successful student. On the other hand, I was not impressed with her SAT's score because she could have done better.====

====Jasmine's essay was upsetting. She mostly talked about her mother. I feel like I know her mother more than her. She never answer the "real question". I feel like she didn't took her time writing this essay. However, I liked what she did outside of school. For all four years she stick with her STEP Program and Drama club. She also was in the Church Choir and she join to babysit. This shows me she a responsible student.====

====Going threw Kaylah Serrano's grades was okay but I thought she could have done better. Her strength was Math and Spanish. Her SAT's score was good but not that good. Her regents score was okay too. She did very good in her Math test. She's have problems with Living Environment and English classes.====

====I didn't liked the activities that she was involved in. She didn't do much and it showed me she didn't do a lot of things outside the school. Her essay was great! She didn't have no spelling or grammar mistakes.====

In reviewing William Santos grades was disappointing. His grades never changed during the four years of high school. However, his regents score was better than his transcript. I also was supprised with his SAT's score. It was mostly between 600's and 650's. William is a leader. His activities were okay. He played in a Drama club, joined the Comic Book Club and also joined the Film Appreciation.

He was an employer at Fanta's Hardware and at AMC Movie Theater, Union Square. His essay was upsetting. He didn't talked much about him. It showed me that he wrote this essay very fast. He mostly did not answer the "real question". His letter of Recommendation didn't say much but it said more than his personal statement.

In conclusion, the candidate that I choose is Roman Polanco because he showed that he took school seriously. His first two years he was slacking around but then he started noticing that going into college is important. I found that his activities are what he found most valuable because it showed me that he did a lot of activities outside school and to me that makes him a more well-rounded person.