Fernando+Palomeque+admissions+essay

==== As an admissions officer I ranked the T.E.A.R.S as the __Transcript__, because the transcript tells the college how did the student did in the past 4 years. It tells the college if the student was studying hard in high school or just being lazy all 4 years. It also show if the student had a upward trend or a downward trend. It also show if the student took challenging classes in high school. The second most important thing for me is the __Recommendation__, because it tells the colleges your your strength and your weakness. It also tells us your citizenship, and challenges you've overcome. The third important thing is the __Essay__, because it tell the college about the student. Another thing is that the essay tells us how you've grown in the past 4 years. __Activities__ are not that important to me, because I think that some student have different talents than other like math, poetry, etc. But its kinda important to me because I want my college to be like in the finals in sports, but it doesn't really matter to me. The __S.A.T.s__ are not important to me. I think the transcript tells me more about the student because it has all four years grade, but the SAT just tell me about one day test. ====

In reviewing Kayla Serrano application. I saw in her __transcript__ that she had 70's, 80's, and 90's. I also saw and upward trend in math. Also she had only one absence in all her 4 years in high school. Her strength was math and Spanish. But she also had a weakness that is English. I like that she took challenging classes like Intesive Advanced math, and Honors Spanish III. She didn't did bad on her regents but she didn't did good to. I like the fact that as an high school student she took college classes. Her __Recommendation__ was strong. It wasn't faint phrase. I also like that the teacher told us her strength that was math and Spanish and her weakness that was English. Her __essay__ was excellent. She had a perfect hook and epiphany that made me wanna read. I like that she included a before and after. The most thing that I like is that she took her time writing the essay, it wasn't a spaghetti sauce essay. Her __activities__ was not that great, because she had family to take care of and I understand that. Plus she work 20 hours a week an still manage to come to school at time. She was breadth over depth. Her __S.A.T.s__ was above average in math. She had a 520 in math, 400 in Critical Reading, and a 450 in Writing. I think she could had a higher grade in math but she did all she could and the SAT are not a big deal with.

While looking at Roman Polanco __transcript__ I saw that he had a huge upward trend. He went from 60's and 70's to 80's and 90's. He had terrible lateness/ absence in 9th grade. But he did better each year. He had pretty good regents score he had 80's. His __Recommendation__ was good. It wasn't faint praise. It said he was trustworthy and a leader. It also said he was a late bloomer but he improved every year. It said that he was a good citizenship. He did a excellent job in his __essay__. He answer the real question that is tell me about you. He has a epiphany cause he learned that he should became a leader before. He has an before and after. For example before he was hopeless and after he became inspired. His activities was great he was student ambassadors for all 4 year thats Depth. What I most like that he was the Leader for student ambassadors in 12 grade. His __S.A.T.s__ was around average. He had 480 and Critical Reading, 510 in Math, and a 490 in Writing.

While looking at Jasmine's __transcript__ I saw that she got mostly 80's and 90's in her classes, and im surprise that she got only one 79. I also saw that she had a upward trend in English. Her attendance was not bad she had a few absence, but she only had one lateness in all 4 years. Her regents was slightly above average, she had 70's and mid 80's. Her __recommendation__ was strong. They said her strength was math and science. They said she took extra science and technology program. Her recommendation was not faint praise. Her __essay__ was not good at all. It had hook. But she didn't answer the real question, and her essay was about her mom. She had no epiphany or a before and after change. Her activities was depth, because she was in drama club for four years. She also was in the knitting club for 11Th and 12Th grade. She also had two jobs. she was babysitting and a junior tour guide. Her __S.A.T.s__ was below average. She had 430 in critical reading, 470 in math, and 410 in writing.

William Santo's __transcript__ was bad. He got mostly 60's and 70's. He has very poor attendance. He had and upward trend in 12Th grade, but his regents score are very high. His __recommendation__ was weak. It was totally faint praise. I didn't saw his strengths or weakness. I didn't even saw his accomplishment. It even said that he was smart but lazy. His __essay__ wasn't good at all. He didn't have no hook or epiphany. He didn't answer the real question, and it looks like he did his essay on the last minute. William did do some __activities__ but he keep going to different clubs that breadth as opposed to depth. But he was the founder of a comic magazine about a super innovator, that shows leadership. His __S.A.T.s__ was average. He got 600 in all of them. He got 600 in critical reading, 620 in math, and a 650 in writing.

After comparing all of the candidates I think that Roman is the strongest candidate for me and is my choice. The upward trend on his transcript told me that he could improve each year. His strong essay, recommendation, and activities makes him an excellent student for my college and his welcome to come to my college.