asa+holley+admissions+essay

=INTRODUCTION= =As an admission officer I ranked the T.E.A.R.S in the following orders. First transcript, because grades means the most important to me. I think that recommendations is the second most important because, it shows how the students have a strong relationship with the teacher. Third most important is essays, it shows how well you can write and tells us a little about your background, fourth is SAT'S , It shows if you are good at test taking or not. Last but not least activities. It is good to see what kind of activities you participated in. As an admission officer this is what i rank most important.= = = =William Santos= =The first contender I will talk about is William Santos. I would now talk about his transcript. William Santos regents score was very good. His lowest grade was a eighty-seven in living environment. His highest score was a 91 in U.S History. In Global studies regent he got a ninety. In integrated algebra he got an eighty-nine.In English he got an eighty-eight. William Santos three of the regents in 2012. He took two of the regents in 2013. in total he took five regents. William santos therefore is good at test taking. William Santos grades were not that good. He had a lot of sixty-five and there was not much of a upward trend. His essay does not answer the real question. The essay has no hook and does not tell us anything about himself. William Santos was a member of four clubs, but only participated in the all four clubs for one year. He was a founder for one club and stayed with it for only his senior year. This shows that he is not a leader.William Santos was a member of the JV soccer team. William Santos recommendation letter was a feint praise. The teacher only told us that he ready for college level and how great his SAT'S were. The teacher did not say anything about his behavior in class. William Santos SAT'S score was very good. He averaged about a six hundred on all SAT'S. I believed that this is a good thing because, this shows how focus he was in class or how much he really remembered his work. The SAT'S are everything crammed in one. This is why i believe SAT'S are important.=

=Jasmine Duke= =The second contender is Jasmine Duke. I would now talk about her transcript. Jasmine Duke grades are very good. She has an upward trend from tenth grade to twelve grade. Her attendance is great. Her most absences were four times in the twelve grade. Jasmine Duke essay was not as good. She did not have a hook. She also did not answer the real question.She only talk about her mother and not herself. Therefore we don't much about her. Jasmine Duke was a member of the drama club. She was a member for all four years. This shows that she is a leader and is committed to what she does. Jasmine Duke also had two jobs. Jasmine Duke is a well respected young lady from what I see. She is respected by all teachers and her peers. Jasmine has overcome several obstacles in her life. Her family is a immigrant family looking for a new life. This shows me how strong she is through life. Jasmine SAT,s score was not as great. She got below the average score. Jasmine averaged about four hundred as a SAT score. For Jasmine hard work I would let her go and come to my school because she is such a hard worker and because,of her recommendations by her counselor.=

=Kaylah Serrano= =Next I will talk about Kaylah Serrano. Her grades were good. She had an upward trend from ninth grade to twelve grade. Her Attendance was excellent. She only was absence once in tenth grade. This shows that she is consistent with her grades. Next I will talk about her essay. I really like her essay and think it tells me about herself, where she comes from, and how she is determined to learn. This also shows me how she chose education over her own emotions, and homeland. Her essay does answer the real question. Yes, Kaylah has an hook. Kaylah was a member of the jamming cares club for only her freshman year. She also walked her younger brother to school for her freshman and sophmore year. Kaylah also had a job working at Dunkin' Donuts. Kaylah recommendation was great. It told us how well of a student she is in class. She overcame several obstacles, like not speaking any English in her freshmen year to speaking English. Kaylah is really a hard worker. For example, she works twenty-five hours per week at Dunkin' Donuts just to support her family back in Nicaragua. This is such a large burden for just a young lady. Her SAT'S score were okay. She averaged five hundred on the Math SAT'S. She is very good in math but, needs to work on her reading and writing. I would still accept her to attend my school because, she is such a hard worker.=

=Roman Polanco= =The last person I will talk about is Roman Polanco. Roman grades are okay. Their was an upward trend in eleventh and twelve grade. His attendance was poor. He was absent a lot and late a lot. Roman essay was good. It somewhat answer the real question. It has a hook. His essay talks about being a ambassador. He walked with a bunch of people, that fought against breast cancer. Roman was a member of the student ambassadors for three years but, then he became a leader in his senior year. He was in multiple clubs as an member besides the student ambassador. He also worked at a taco shop on weekends for eighteen hours. Roman's recommendation was okay but, I consider this as a faint praise. It really didn't say much about his grades or anything. It told more about the activities he do outside and in of school. Roman SAT'S scores is good. They are all very close to five hundred. I would take him to attend my college because, he has good grades and good SAT'S scores.= = = = = =CONCLUSION= =I would picked Roman Polanco. He has good SAT'S score and good grades. The only thing that I dislike is that he was absent a lot through the school year. My my main focus on T.E.A.R.S is the transcript, so therefore I would accept him to my university college.=