Eric+Gonzalez+Admissions+Essay

As an admissions officer. I am going to rank the TEARS in the order I feel is important. Transcript is first, I wan't to see an upward trend and or a constant level of grades. Next, having a good recommendation from a teacher, supervisor and advisor describing the troubles and hardships the student has to face.Then it's the SAT scores, I would wan't to see great efforts and grades to see if the students have the skills to be on a college level. Essay is next, I want to read for myself what the student is like when it comes to real life issues, struggles and their academic struggles aswell. Lastly is activities. While activities arn't a big concern, I would like to see what the student has done the past four years during high school.

While I was reviewing Roman Polanco's application I noticed the upward trend he had on his grades. His grades went from 65's to 90's during freshman and sophomore years onto junior and senior years. Also, his attendance and lateness were really really bad and makes me wonder what he was doing when he was absent? But he got on track and focused on something very important. His grades. He realized his grades were a key factor and improved a lot. His SAT's were great. He was able to rebound his grades into his SAT's which to me is very good

Roman's Participation in after school activities were very great. Roman participated in Student Ambassador for all Four years of high school and during senior year became Student Ambassador leader. It proved although he slacked off, he was well commited to become and excelent student for college. Another thing that pleased me, was during 11th grade he was on the Debate Club up until he graduated high school showing he found a new interest in politics.

His essay was great. Not great, it was terrific. It seemed like his accomplishments being Student Ambassador all into 500 words. It had a great hook and kept dragged me into reading more about his day in Central Park and the Breast Cancer walk. I enjoyed reading about what he done for his club, and I really loved he was a leader for the walk. I liked the counselor recommendation but he really didn't seem like he gave the effort into his review. I felt Roman did a great job in going on track to becoming a great leader.

Jasmine Duke's transcript is great. Her grades remained the same throughout all years and her lateness and absences were low, proving she was able to go to school on time and do her work. I enjoyed all the effort she seemed to have put on her grades. Their all 80's and 90's and she had one 79 but it really didn't hurt her because she was able to recover from it. While she had great grades she managed to get all of her credits for high school. Her SAT's wasn't great but she passed. She kept it from a 70 to 80 Range and passed all her subjects

I wasn't happy with her essay. It talked a lot about her mother, instead of herself which would be very helpful when it comes towards her personality. But overall it talked about her mother being her inspiration which is a great key factor to her. Not necessarily about her. But an inspirational figure in her life. Her recommendation seemed great. Talking about her school life and her personality and why she should be on the campus is good to hear from a college counselor. It means she's a terrific student.

I Really enjoyed how committed she was towards the drama club. She was in the for all four years and had a major roles in four plays. She was also in the knitting club for 11th and 12th which was great since she found another activity which interested her, outside of the drama club

Kaylah Serrano's Transcript looks good. Not so good, but it looks great. She seems to have struggled in basic area's like global, living environment and English. But in math and P.E she seems to have aced it all. During Sophomore to Senior she aced Spanish and had a high grade on me which made me curious. Her SAT score wasn't very great but she managed to pass her classes.

Kaylah's essay was terrific. I enjoyed her essay but it was waaaay to long. I also got to understand why she wasn't so efficient when it came to grades. I found out she was from Nicaragua, and specialized in Spanish. I know what her struggles are and she seemed to overcome it. I noticed she was good in math which is a main asset in life. Her college counselor gives her very great praise and talked a lot about her personality in school and outside it.

When it came to activities Kaylah didn't do much. She said had a part time job at Dunkin` Donuts and she did it to support her family. Also she stated she had a hard time making friends which could be a reason why she wasn't in most clubs. But she was in a couple of clubs

William Santos's grades wasn't on average. He had a lot of 60's and 70's and barley had 80's and 90's. He also had a lot of lateness's and absences and didn't recover from it. William took Intensive advanced math which he passed. William also had great SAT scores ranging from 80's to 90's.

William's essay was horrible. Very horrible. He didn't put much effort into it. He talked about school being boring and expects college to be fun. And to top it off he didn't even explain about himself, his struggles, or anything in particular to himself. To make things even worse for William. His college counselor did not write much meaning he probably lied or just wasn't much to prove about William Santos being a great schoolar

While William's grades are not perfect he did a lot of great activities. He joined the drama club, JV soccer team, film appreciation and comic book club. William had a lot of breadth and didn't stick to one club. But what really made him shine is him creating his own club called Inno-Zine. A comic magazine about an innovation student with great abilities.

All of these students are great scholars and shown to improve over the years. But the student I seem to like and I admire is Kaylah Serrano. While Kaylah Serrano's grades were not above average she was a foriegner from a Spanish country. She tried her best to keep her grades up all year long, and while keeping them up she was able to overcome her challenges, learn English better and kick up her grades from 60's and 70's into 80's and 90's. While her SAT scores lacked a lot, she was able to get a decent grade. Her strong essay talked a lot about her and her college counselor backed her up. I strongly Recommend Kaylah Serrano to be in your college. She will make a great asset and will try her best no matter what.