Nyesha+Alston+Admissions+Essay

//As an admission officer, I rank the 5 tears. The most important to me in a student application is their essay following by a strong transcript and a nice lovely recommendation letter. After that I will like to see what kind of activities the student participate in and what kind of jobs they were a part of. Lastly I look at their S.A.T scores, because I’m really not a big fan of how a student did on their test. //

‍Roman Polanco transcript great, well I mean it wasn’t the best but it was ok. His grades had an up-ward trend with 60's to 70's to 80's then 90's. I love to see that in a student, how good they approve each year. Roman attendance was horrible they were a big problem. In 9 grades his attendance and lateness were unbelievable, but each year he was improving, He finishes junior and senior fantastic.

‍Roman essay was excellent. It had a very strong hook; it made me want to read more. This essay was written well done. There was no spelling mistakes or no grammar mistakes. Roman epiphany was great; he realized he could inspire people, shows he realized he was doing something good.

‍Roman was a student as ambassador for all four years of high school, he wasn’t a flip flop Roman had stick with one thing. Roman was a leader at innovation cares 9th grade. Colleges love leaders. Roman had worked at a restaurant.

‍Roman Polanco gave a positive attitude. As a leader Roman showed his character and citizenship what he was doing. Roman weakness was global history, and his strengths were integrated algebra.

‍Roman did well on his test; he had an average score on his s.a.t. scores. Roman s.a.t. sores were above level. S.A.T should not be optional because the college is testing on what you already know and that shouldn’t be very hard.

‍For Kayla, I thought her transcript grades they were not so bad and they were not so good, Kayla mostly got 70’s and 80’s. She really didn’t have an up-ward trend. Kayla attendance and lateness were excellent, they were perfect.

Kayla essay was excellent. She answered the real question, it told a lot about her she has grown to a better person. Kayla had an outstanding hook it made me want to read it more and wanted to know more about her. Kayla recommendation it’s very good, it tells she was a volunteer and very independent.

Kayla really wasn’t involved in any activities. It was mostly depth over breadth, she wasn’t a leader or anything, but she did work. It really didn’t say anything about her it wasn’t a faint praise. Kayla S.A.T. scores is very good, she passed all of the test got good grades on them. Kayla struggle in critical reading but was strong in math, she had an above average in the math test.

William Santos transcript was horrible it disgust me, his essay was bad too it was not good at all. The recommendation letter was ok but there’s was not a lot to say about him. William did activities, but it was breadth over depth. His S.A.T. scores were excellent, they all were above average.

Jasmine Duke Transcript is good; her grades are on point from 9th to 12th. She is a strong student, but she should have taken challenging class or honor classes. Jasmine essay really made me upset, she didn’t answer the real question that was supposed to talk about her.

For all 4 candidates, I think Roman Polanco is the strongest. I had chosen him because he had an up-ward trend on his transcript. He had the best essay and recommendation; also he stuck with one activity, and a leader. I would welcome him to my college. = =