Taira-Lynn+Matos+comparitive+essay


 * __Taira Lynn M. 9O1^__**

**__Comparative Essay__** As an admissions officer at WAVY U, I ranked the TEARS in Transcript first followed by a great recommendation after. I ranked transcript first because it not only tells how many times they were late and absent, it also tells the grades. It may show an upward trend. I ranked Recommendation second because it may allow us to know much more about the person such as personality and NOT faint praise. Recommendation also elaborates on the transcript. After recommendation I put essay. Essay may also explain more about them and sometimes can show how much of a contribution they can make in the school. Then I put activities and SAT's. The activities can show leadership or the term "Depth over Breadth”, that term is showing whether the person is dedicated to do something or if they don't show much care for it. Lastly I put SAT's because sometimes the tests are biased.

In reviewing Roman Polanco's application, I noticed in the transcript he did badly in his first year and then made his way up such as an upward trend. The second thing I looked at was the recommendation. I felt that his recommendation was great and showed full support on why Roman deserves to be at our college. Thirdly I looked at was the essay. I felt his essay was great; it had a great hook. He also had a great epiphany when he suddenly realizes not to give up. Second to last I looked at Activities. Although he was in more than 1 activity he also was a Lead Ambassador. Our college loves leaders. And lastly SAT’s. He didn’t have great scores but covered all other topics perfectly.

As I reviewed William Santos application the first thing I looked at was the transcript. In reviewing his transcript I noticed he had mostly 60's and he had some strengths and weaknesses. He had 193 lateness' and 100 absences. Secondly I reviewed his Recommendation. His recommendation wasn't great and it was faint praise. It says if he would've applied himself that he would do well. He also had great SAT scores. Thirdly I looked at essay; I feel it doesn't answer much about him. It has no hook or epiphany. It doesn't even show if he grown. I feel William was all over the place in terms of activities. He had home chores and also worked at AMC Movie Theater and Fanta's hardware. He was the founder of Inno-Zine. Lastly I looked at SAT’s; he did great and had between 600-650 on all tests.

While looking at Jasmine Duke's Transcript I see she did well in all classes and passed the regents with 80’s and above. She didn’t take any challenging courses. While looking at her recommendation she was from another country and still managed to pass classes. It shows strengths and weaknesses. Shows she has used all her effort to learn with very little English to speak. Thirdly I looked at her essay. Her essay wasn’t even about her it was about her mom. When looking at the activities I can see that she had done a lot and stood in some activities. On her SAT’s she got low scores, below average.

I was most impressed with Kaylah Serrano's application because each one of the TEARS was great. In her transcript she had decent grades, challenging courses and good attendance. From looking at her recommendation she had great support from her counselor. It also elaborated on her transcript. Thirdly I looked at her essay and I felt it had a good hook. It also had an epiphany and it was great. Then I looked at activities, she didn’t do much but she, made an effort to get a job and work. Lastly I looked at SAT’s, she didn’t do as well on Critical reading but was slightly above average in math.

In conclusion I feel that the best candidate for our college, WAVY U, is Kaylah Serrano. I feel she did a great job. Even though she didn’t do as well on her SAT’s she did exceptionally well on everything else. She also had good grades and great attendance. She will be someone we should have for our college. Kaylah’s counselor Art Samuels did a great job and his recommendation was really convincing. We will love to have her at our college.