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@Ashley Harmon,Annual Project

Ashley's Persuasive Essay

Ashley Harmon

903

Febuary.6.2012

Roman Polanco:

9th and10th grade was not Romans best years nor was it his worst. In the 9th grade Roman received mostly 65's through 75's. In the 10th grade Roman received mostly 70's and 80's. Through the first 2 years you can tell that Roman pushed himself to receive better grades. Now when we look at 11th and 12th grade Roman did extremely well. In 11th grade he still I think Roman has small problem with his lateness’s but that’s probably about it. On Romans S.A.T's He did awesome!! He made sure they were all above a 70. This shows that Roman is a very intelligent student. Now when we look at Romans Senior activity sheet I would give it about a rate of 80% Roman was Student Ambassador for all of the years he was in High school. For the first 3 years he was a Member but in 12th he became the leader. Romans community activities were not that well but I assume it was because of his clubs and programs during the week. Roman was a Soup kitchen volunteer at Innovation Cares for one year which was 9th grade. He also was a part of central Park Clean-up for his 9th grade year. The work experience section is okay. In the 10th grade he worked at Julio Franco's El Ricon Restaurant and Taco shop for 18 hours on the weekend. His position was a Bus boy, cashier, and waiter. As you look at Romans personal statement you notice that it is not a spaghetti sauce essay. His essay was very well written and it does answer the "real question". It also has a great hook, It has specific examples, and it also epiphany and a before and after. Now lastly as we look at Roman Polano's counselor recommendation you see Art actually was not hesitant to write Romans recommendation. Roman received some very great complements through this reccomendation. It was an absolute pleasure for Art to write this recommendation.

William Santos:

I can see that from 9th through 11th grade William has seemed to not care about his grades. William failed many classes. He received all 74's or less for the first 3 years. For 12th grade he received 75’s through 96's which shows that he waited until the last minute to catch up on everything he lost. William also has a problem with his lateness’s and absences.as for his standardized test he did very well, which shows William is very smart. In the senior activity sheet he was in the drama club for one year. He also participated as a member in the soccer team. William was a member of the comic book club and Film Appreciation day for one day. As for home activities he just had the just did the basics as everyone else. He was an employer for 7 years as stock boy at Fanta's hardware for 12 hours a week. Then he worked at AMC Movie Theater and Union Square as Ticket sales person for 18 hours a week during school and 35 hours during the summer, from12th grade until now. Williams’s personal statement was HORRIBLE it was thrown together and had no work put into it. Truthfully it seemed as if he took 2 minutes to write this "essay." His recommendation letter was also not well written. There wasn’t many compliments and nor did it mention what other course he took that can give him a boost.

Jasmine Duke:

Jasmine is AMAZING! She never received anything below a 79 through her whole high school year. The lowest grade Jasmine received was a 79.Her standardized test we awesome. Jasmine truly did amazing this year. For 4 years straight Jasmine participated in Step Program (CUNY) and Drama Club. For 11th and 12th grade Jasmine participated in Scripture reader and a member at The Knitting with Claire Club. In 9th through 11th grade she was in Church Choir. Her work experience was awesome. She babysat at Lawrence and Darby Jett for 10 hours for 10th grade. She also worked an internship at the children’s museum for science. Her position was a junior tour guide for 30 hours. Her personal statement isn’t really all that but it does make a person think. Especially the fact that it has a hook, and an epiphany. Art has given Jasmine the best recommendation yet. He complemented her in many ways, shapes and forms. In my opinion Jasmine would be fit for ANY college she would want to go to.

Kaylah Serrano: Now Kaylah didn’t do bad...........but she didn’t do great either. She received 70's ,80's and 90's but not anything below a 65.She did great on her S.A.T's and she does not have a problem with latenesses nor does she have a problem with being absent. Kaylah really didn’t participate in many activities but her personal statement was great. It most definitely not thrown together and it made COMPLETE sense. And the best part of this is how her Art actually wanted to write this, and had great compliments to say in this recommendation in my opinion Kaylah would be fit for ANY college she would want to go also.

Conclusion: In my opinion i would most defienatly choose Jasmine Duke. The reason why i choose her is becaue not once did she fail one class during her 4 years. The lowest she recieved was a 79. As i said before Jasmine can get into ANY college she would like to. I am glad she asked to join this college. I most deifanetly accept her.