Diangela+Quijano+admissions+essay

As and admissions officer, I am very determined to know what it takes to be a good student to attend my college. I look for a strong recommendation from the student’s guidance counselor because this tells me that this student is very determined and ready to come to my college and a teacher is there to back her up. Then I look for a well written essay because this lets me know about the student without figuring it out on the transcript. Third I want the transcript to explain the excellence and the hard work this student has put in to show me that they are ready. Fourth I also like to see their activities be ones they can commit to and show me that they’re a leader. Lastly I like to look at the SAT scores because to me I don’t find them important. In my opinion I think it’s better to define a person and how well they’re doing in four years then in one day based on one test.

While going through Kayla Serrano's recommendation letter what grabbed my attention was when her guidance counselor stated when she first enrolled in that high school she worked exceedingly hard to pass her classes and those are things I like to hear. Another thing I liked was that the recommendation the counselor wrote for her didn't have a faint praise and that shows this teacher really meant what he said. I also like that she took certain challenging college level classes at CUNY- Hunter college on math and Spanish in wich she is most strong in. On Kayla's transcript her grades aren't the best but she does put in effort and that takes slot to me and shows great leadership. Her attendance is unbelievably great throughout the whole four years she has had zero latenesses and only one absence I find that very impressing. Kayla not only took challenging college classes but in the school year she took certain challenging classes in a school activity called enrichment week. I also noticed and upward trend on her transcript.

When I got to Kayla's essay that was a very well written essay I loved everything about it. In the beginning of Kayla's essay she had a very strong intro that kept my eyes glued to paper. Her essay was marvelous and it was so well written that I felt like I could've connected with her and really understand where she was coming from. Kayla's essay definitely has an epiphany and it answers the real question that we are asking for her to answer. In Kayla's essay there is a before and after that explains how she overcame her loneliness and made friends. Her essay wasn't perfect there was a little mistake in the beginning but other than that she had good spelling and grammar and her essay wasn't a spaghetti sauce essay.

Kayla for the activities she didn't do much but she did work in dunkin' donuts she went there straight after school to help and support her family plus she worked there twenty hours a week. Even though Kayla lacked on her activities she did alot of home chores. I honestly wish Kayla would've done more activities to show me that she is a true leader. Lastly,Kayla's SAT scores they were below average but her regents test were great her scores were very good.

As I was going through Romans recommendation letter it was good but I wouldn't say it was the best. Romans guidance counselor even said that he believes Roman is a late bloomer and has now seen what he had to do to reach his goals. On Romans transcript his grades were very good they also had an upward trend which I find very impressing and good. What didn't impress me on his transcript were his lateness and absence he had a lot of lateness's and absence that doesn't seem like a good leader to me it makes me wonder can he commit coming to my school and to his classes on time and will he even attend to them. Roman does have his strength and his weaknesses. His strength is Spanish and his weaknesses are math and science but he does try hard form the looks of his transcript.

When I got to Romans essay I was very impressed and it blew me away. Roman had a very good intro I did not want to stop reading he had a great hook and his moment of realization was just overwhelming it made me want to join him on his walk through Central park. What he did was very influencing this shows to me that he could be a leader. In his essay he does answer the big question and he answers it very well and his essay had perfect spelling and grammar and it wasn't a spaghetti sauce essay.

Roman was a lead Ambassador when he got to his senior year and he has been in that club since his freshman year he worked his way up and that really proves to me that he can be a leader. Roman also did this for his community he volunteered in a soup kitchen in freshman year and he also helped clean central park. Roman also worked as an employer at a restaurant he worked on weekends eighteen hours each weekend very impressive to me. Lastly on Roman's SAT scores he got below average but he did try he took them twice and on all his regents he passed which is very good to me.

On Jasmine's recommendation letter it was ok wouldn't say to good neither. Also on Jasmine's recommendation letter her counselor says she tries very hard gets her work done and he is very proud at what she does and overcomes with all that goes on his her life and he is pruoud of that. On her transcript her grades are very good and her strengths are math and science and this does make sense to me with what she wants to become which is a doctor and I find that very good and accomplishing. Also Jasmine is very good with her lateness and absence which is good and shows leadership

When I got to her essay I was very disappointed because she did not answer the question and I really wish she had. Jasmine's essay didn't tell us anything about her and it had no epiphany and that was a big disappointment. It didn't tell me anything about herself. Also it looks like she didn't take her time writing it, it looks as if she rushed on writing it.