Paschell+Morris+Admissions+Essay

As an admissions officer I ranked the TEARS in this order:Transcript first because I feel like grades and attendance are very important.Second is Essay, because in a essay you get to learn who that person really was.This Recommendation, because you get to know more about a person through there teacher and how they acted throughout there 4 years of high school.Fourth is Activities, because you get to learn what they did outside of school.And lastly SAT scores.And the reason why I feel that SATs should go last is because one test shouldn't count for the amount of effort and time that you put into your four years of high school.

In reviewing Roman Polanco's application,I saw that he made an "Upward Trend" throughout his four years of high school.His latenesses and attendence was okay but couldve been much better. Roman’s SAT scores were below average, and he could’ve done very well. Also his standardized tests were mainly 80’s, but in Global he got a 79 which is not great but still a passing grade. In Roman’s personal statement, I liked how his hook really caught my attention and his epiphany was great. He also made me feel like I was in central park with him. He did a lot of activities throughout his 4 years of high school. He became part of the student ambassador club and was a member for 3 years and became leader his senior year. He also worked at a restaurant from his 10th grade year until now and worked very long hours including weekends. I noticed that in Roman’s recommendation his college counselor gave him “Genuine Praise” instead “Faint Praise”.

As I reviewed K aylah Serrano Transcript I noticed that she also made an "Upward Trend" in her four years of high school.Her attendance and lateness was outstanding. And seemed like it wasn't a problem for her.As I looked through her SAT scores I noticed that her Critical Reading and Writing SATs were slightly below average, but passed her Math. But as reviewed her personal statement I had noticed that English wasn't her first language and I could see why she struggled with English.In her personal statement i felt like she had a great epiphany and excellent hook. Her activities weren't well at all. She joined the Jamming Cares Club and only stayed for her 9th grade.And she walked her younger brother to school every morning for a home activity and only did that for two years. what happened to her junior year of high school.And during her 12th grade she worked at Dunkin' Donuts and is still working there.I noticed that she didn't really do anything productive throughout her four years of high school.

As I looked over William Santos Transcript I was very disappointed with it. i saw that in his freshman years he barely passed all his classes. And made an "Upward Trend" throughout his four years of high school and his lateness and attendance was unacceptable.And as reviewed her SAT scores saw that he passed all three of them.When I looked at his personal essay I was shocked at how many word he had written, which was only at least 70 words.When I looked at his activity sheet I saw that he didn't last long in any clubs he joined.